Only the cold night wind knows me
Burrowing through my body
Revealing the contents of my heart
Searching through my thoughts and emotions
Temporarily numbing me,
to the hurt that feeds the internal beast
It's growing stronger by the years
thriving on the pain from my tears and fears
As I look towards the sky,
and say good-night
to the lunar illumination
I walk inside ending this vision of my imagination
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Written February 21st, 2006
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quite the haunting familiar scenerio...and reoccuring with the return of the fall bearing winter.
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aww, thanks
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thank you!
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Great job i really enjoyed reading this, you have a great talent don't stop writing you have a great future in writing poems keep it up
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I liked it a lot. Great job. I like short poems with a lot of impact and this certaily falls into that category!
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lol thank you!
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Yes . . . now this was well executed. Short . . . but strong . . . veri powerful! The only two things that I've noticed that don't follow your rhyme scheme are the lines
"Revealing the contents of my heart"
and the one directly following it
"Searching through my thoughts and my emotions"
But For once . . . I realli don't think it matters! This was just sooooo ridiculously well written! Bravo! Congradulations on a magnificent write! Keep penning . . . and please . . . keep sharing!
Maggie -
awww, thank you very much
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oooooo I am the first one to comment, and being the first one I must say this is very good.....I love the last stanza
As I look towards the sky,
and say good-night
to the lunar illumination
I walk inside ending this vision of my imagination
I like how illumination and imagination kinda rhym, but not perfectly......it really complimented the last stanza
I really enjoyed this write....keep it up!!
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