DARK CLOUDS FULL WITH SUN RAYS
WANTING PRAISE
THE PAVEMENT GLITTERS FROM THE RAIN
SENDING A HIDDEN MESSAGE ACROSS WITH THE PANTS STAIN
sitting waiting wanting
*more*
AS THE PROFESSOR EXPLAINS HIS PHILOSOPHY
HE'S FEEDING
MAMA'S ARE TRAINED TO BE A PAIN
IT SEEMS NO ONE GAINS
singing speaking teaching
*the score*
AS THE FLOWER BLOSSOMS
IT PARTS
EXTENDING ITS ARMS
THERE GOES GODS ART
spreading dividing dissecting
*poor*
WHEN ON THE VERGE
THERE A CURSE
WHEN AT THE END
THERE IS NO PRETEND
pulling pushing including
*the door*
Author notes
Written February 24th, 2006
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Thanks for the comment all comments are worth to be expressed. Well the poem is about life about trails and error about how one would want more when they have less or when a lesson could've been less painful and when at times when one doesnt want to part from something the is inevitable.
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Hi. I like the form in this it works really well, it makes it a good read, as in like flow and pace. Well it does to me anyway, or maybe cause I read it in time to the music I was listening to... Anyway, I liked it though i have to admit i didnt understand it fully, I could geuss at bits. I cna't think of anything to improve it to be honest! (i know it's not very helpful comment, but I thought i should tell you that i thought the layout and form worked well)
keep writing
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