Death is more common than giving birth where I'm from
14 years old that's all I am
Not sure I'll ever make it through
After all, I'm alone, motherless and abandon
I have no place to really call home
The street I suppose;
never providing me a bed that is safe and warm
Never silent, something is always happening
Sometimes it is gun shots
and other times just plain sirens
Sometimes I wonder, when will my day come?
Each day I wake up to see stain blood on the floor
I am sitting here swimming in my thoughts
Hoping to somehow understand the meaning of me
A boy that is lost and in the blue
Living in a world so cold and so cruel
Wishing upon stars for answers...
Asking myself questions, tomorrow where will I be?
Looking at life's tragedies, I get the chills
Always paranoid, always running scared,
Afraid I'm next to get killed.
Every time I look at my rear view mirror
Something strange I see
Scars from the past and wounds of today
All build up together to destroy me
And still I wonder why?
Only to discover the truth
That there are thousand of stars up in the sky
And mine will never shine...
I cry so many tears
one way to calm the fear
Salty tears often cascade down my face
But hunger always keep me awake
Pain and misery make me strong
but my memories often break my bones.
If God was not on my side,
I'd probably be dead by now
Therefore, I'm so thankful to be alive
Author notes
Mr. Mack
9.depression
I'm sure one can tell of how sad this piece is. Back then, I was very disturbed and thought that my life was the only life that was messed up. I even thought about dying multiple times, yet, I'm still breathing. When I go back to the end of times, I realize, I am one bless sucker who took life for granted. I'm shamefully sad for the most stellar blessing of my life, I was unaware of.
Hope everyone enjoys this
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good job and good luck
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Great poem I can really feel the emotion of a child in it. good luck in the contest!
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How deeply profound and emotion driven... x
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As I read your story, my ayes began to tear up. This is sad and I'm really sorry about what you had to go through. I hope everything turns out ok. Best of luck to you now and in your future.
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great and emotional. i can picture your troubles. great job!
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Thsi is a really great poem,It has so much emotion. I really like this. keep up the good woek, and thank you so much for entering my contest, ♥ Christina
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Thanks!
A really emotive write. Most definately puts things into perspective.
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Even though it was sad, I enjoyed this poem a lot. It gives a unique look into the raw emotions involved in street life, right down to the tears. Thanks for sharing this and for entering this contest.
Paul -
Thank you.
Thank you for your poem.I appreciate it very much.
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sad
I like this poem. I m sorry that you have had such a rough life and I am so happy that you have faith! Hang in there! God Bless! -
Thank you for entering my humble little contest
I am enjoying this one alot - I hope you had as much fun entering as I am reading all the different entries! I am really getting some good stuff this time around
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This is a really nice Great use of emotions in it I wish you the best of luck in Me a poet maybe's contest
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Nice
I did enjoy this Very nice work and thank you for entering.
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Awakening View
I never thought "lost boy" would mean one surviving, but after reading this "how ignorant am I." Thank you for writing this, a clear crisp view of another's life - gives one a different way to reflect upon the self.
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Oooh this was good very heartfelt. I don't know wut else to call it good job. Thanks and good luck. Keep writing.
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This turned out completely different than I expected! I was afraid I was going to have to DQ your entry in the beginning. Thanks for the surprise! Good luck and thank you for the entry!
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Thgis is a very sad but interesting peice of work here. I hate the fact that there are people out there who need help, who can't make it on their own because of the cards dealt to them, while executives ride around in their limos and expensive cars, taking their girlfriends to fancy dinners, than bringing gold home to the wife. It makes me so sick. We need to realise that we are all human, we all have flesh and blood and if we do not begin to take care of our fellow bothers and sisters we are going to self destruct faster than we know. Such a sad write, such emotion! Great peice and good luck in the contest!
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The part before the last saved this. I liked it. Good luck in the contest.
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You really drew me in with this heart felt write. I can't say I know how this feels because I don't. I do however sense in your words a strong will to survive.Survive you will, I'm sure of it. I applaud your courage to share something so personal in this conest. I wish you the best of luck in it. Cathy
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Very sad but you express your feelings very well. It's sad to think that not everyone has a safe, loving place that they can call home. Thank you for entering.
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This was very sad I loved it. I may sound sick and twisted. but...my life isn't cherries and cup cakes i like to relate to the poetry. Great entry...
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Transcend All
I think think contest is a great one for your writing because through your experience other s may see themselves, they may see their day wasn't as bad, or that someone out here understands. You grabbed me, held me through till the end and we're both better in this moment for it! Thank you for sharing your spirit, your pain ! You can make it!
Namaste'
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This is an amazing write but so sad. Thank you for sharing it with me. Thank you for adding it to the contest.Best of luck to you
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this was a great write...your words were strong, powerful and emotional as well..your words were strng, powerful and emotional as well i enjoyed reading this write keep writting your talented and good luck in the contest
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Its great.
I love this lonely story and i love the feelins you bring to the write. Keep writing
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nice job good luck
thnks for entering
blessed be '
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This is so sad...I like have you gave it such a vivid outlook...you might not know me but if you ever in seek of hope and inspiration please visit http://www.myspace.com/brhspower Thanks for entering my contest you take care Love, Raneika
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Wow! This is amazing and so sad. Perfect for my contest. I loved the line,
salty tears often cascade down my face
I'm so sorry about all the things you've been through. Just remember it only makes you stronger. I could feel your emotions just bleed through. You have a really good chance. Thanx for entering.
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That there are thousand of stars up in the sky
And mine will never shine
I lik this line. Is this poem true Do you really ge tup and here gun shots around your house. Maybe you should just live me den cause i don't want you to get hurt. This poem was really deep and emotional. This poem got me to cry how you wrote with emottoins.
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Wow. This poem was so deep and heavy. Thoughtful and what I feel like
The imagery was wonderful and the language was beatiful. Very well done
Thanks for entering, well done and good luck
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this is beautifully written. well done.
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excellent
well written..great imagery and vividly portrayed a picture sad yes but the power of your lines the descriptive emotions expressed within your words....brilliant...flowed and has a feeling that reflects your talent....thank you for sharing this and look forward to more of your work -
wow i dont know what to say about this poem...brilliant poem!!! its very sad…deep and very touching! very well written... i love it!!!
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good
hey that is really cool what you wrote. keep up the work -
uhmm yes very sadistic..its a common pain that i see in every "common" teenager!..if this is real then am sorry for your loss!
i loved the way you have pen down your thoughts. doesnt that make somehow feel better?
just to let it out!!
the simplicity of words works perfect leaving a sad mark on readers mind. though the blood factor kind of gives a creepy flavor.
and yes am sure next time you would see a happy climax rising through your bitter experience
keep going
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Ankita
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hey really good keep up the work and thing that you are really good at these types of things -
Great
Great poem. The first line is a definite hook. Really has a sad feeling. Have you considered trying something like it, with more focus on the violence and sense of fear? Great job. -
well done
I've read all your poems on your author page and I,m well impressed with what I saw your a very good writer and you turn out good stuff.I've came back to this one as it's the one I liked most the second verse is very good I got the feel of a lost soul out in the night not knowing what will happen next it's very good.I'm really glad you enjoyed my poem Together I was looking for some fancy name for it when I noticed how many times I said together and the name was born all be it not original I'm glad you liked it theres a lot of others there for you to read in all the different styles of rhyming I hope you'll take closer look.If you contact me I'll recomend one or two for you but if not I'm glad you enjoyed one of mine.Thanks -
That there are thousand of stars up in the sky
And mine will never shine
that is one of the saddest things i have ever read in my entire life. you chilled me with this. another great write from you. the way you seem to always have such a great flow amazes me. i wish i could always do the same. viyanna r langager
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OMG.. wow.. In the beginning I could have sworn you were talking about me (not even bothering with the title of course) when you were saying:
"14 years old that's all I am
Not sure I'll ever make it through
After all, I'm alone, abandon and without a mom"
Because not including the abandonment part-that's exactly my situation! omg!
After all, I am 14, and biological-motherless.
But yeah, I thought this poem was heart-touching, especially for me.. and then to read on and hear about this poor boy's life.. It just makes me wanna snatch him off the streets and call him my own!! You did an excellent job with this and I think I'm going to go ahead and applaud you for it-with all the other entries that deserve applauding, because I'm fixin to go ahead and close this because I'm waiting on some entrants that said they were going to enter......I'm going to have to go over my messages, but anywayssss.....Like I said, this poem really, really touched me. *smiles and claps above everyone else in the audience* yay!!
Lisi
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wonderful poem!!! it was a ture peice of art!
you have a wonderful gift and hope you
praise it! have a wonderful life!
~~Sara~~
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