There you are...
first kiss to last forever,
flying dancing candles
burnt to wax,
melting memory of skin
hiding from her
fragrant,
searching
fingers...
black
lace
fantasies
still sighing,
panting
strokes of
yesterday's
climax.
Did you stow away...
stay
behind to
remind me
of her
tremors,
passion fruit
intoxicating
witch hazel eyes,
my soaring
soul forever
scented.
She left her pictures too....
Dreams manifest in such a
measure of delight....
her
smile
stretches as
she feels my
rising star
explode
auroras
deep within
Some memories are forever.
Some thoughts are born to touch...
so deep
so fast
so forever lasting...
as feather's taste in sipping sensual expression...
In the wetness of
sliding skin…
every sense is brought to
magic...
first kiss, last
as
every
move is
motion
driving
focus
even
deeper.
As bursting wave
explodes emancipation,
we are
raised in wave,
alive,
as breath of soul
in quaking
quiver…
A contest entry
- Looking For Crickets by Celticmoon.
1500 points, ended July 15, 2007, 16 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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filled with imagery!
This poem is filled with a lot of imagery! great job!
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intriguing
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Rich,
You most surely kow how to tickle the senses of your readers. The sensuality that lies within this piece leaves one with breathless sighs. Each line just increases the yearnings from within the heart and soul of the reader. How one could not fall in love with such a masterpiece as this is beyond me. Thank you for entering and good luck!
Blessings
Bel
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High quality of creativity all through but these images only highlight the sensuous remembrance. Strong in flow and I found myself lost in this moment seeing these memories as if they were my own. Blue
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i'm speechless... this is definitely a cricket... wow, i feel so inferior now...
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cricket
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exquisite and so highly sophisticated
beautiful and just beautiful and so refined. Congrats for the gold my friend
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Ah Rich, I thought it was you but it is slightly different from your usual but it was so sensually sublime I found myself reading it over and over again, just sighing. Congratulations and thanks for entering such a stunning piece I loved it. Love, C
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Hand me a towel
Love, C
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yes i love the flow and the depth and ideasof stromng metaphors personfication and such. Your metaphors, similies and such were the most creative. No other poems in this contest had that strong metaphors and such
yet this poem seemed not classic not because of the use of thus meaning the old english but because ofthe flow not a romeo and juliet mellow flow, not a classic peice ofwrite yet this poem wasREALLY GOOD -
Beautiful. Like the picture, this poem is like a dance. Not quite what I'm used to in erotic poetry but still a good write. Thankyou for entering and good luck.
Sara -
A well written piece. The stroke of words are amazing. A field of moments worth rememebering.
Lines worth remembering:
hiding from her
fragrant
searching
fingers...
black
lace
fantasies
still sighing
from the
panting
strokes of
yesterday's
climax.
In line with contest, you were able to keep the words flowing in form. This is like running in the field imagining the world embracing you with joy and laughter.
Thanks for sharing and I wish you goodluck in the contest.
---"I don't know what to say. Do read my mind."---VIRGOAN -
very sensual write
i like it, although the backround was a tid distracting -
Excellent, Rich! Every time I think I have a favorite of yours, you leave me in awe once again...This is just beautiful!
As always, you paint us an amazing picture with your words!
TY for entering this lovely piece, and congrats on making it to the final round!
Lynda
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such a superbly wonderful imagine full of passion and warmth and so sweet and sooooo artistic rising above all lowliness not to soil the beautiful moments picture painted in here!
delightful absolutely!
what is new Rich, as usual divine writing! -
Wow, that was hot! It was exatly what I look for in erotic poetry: Sensual, no sexual, and incredibly beautiful without being trashy... A most impressive piece, my dear. Thanks for sharing!
Much Love,
Laura -
Excellent
Love to hear the womans side of comming together
black
lace
fantasies
still sighing
from the
panting
strokes of
yesterday's
climax.
Amazing -
Wow!
this is just stunning~
you capture the essence to leave one so wholly fulfilled in such awe is truly remarkable writing. a most sensual poem with wonderful imagery.
lynn -
Rich this is simply amazing. It is sensual and lovely and brought many things to mind...
black
lace
fantasies
still sighing
from the
panting
strokes of
yesterday's
climax.
You never fail to bring me quivers...Best of luck...Trina
thanks for celebrating with me!!! -
Rich as much as I adore this piece it did not follow rules...You were suppose to enter a fresh write first and then a prewrite if you wished. I must be fair. Please put this one back in after your fresh one...love, Trina
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Wonderfully written! Sigh...
I am in awe of your fine poetic talent and I am honored that you shared this with me for my contest! Thank you! -
Wow! I like this one! Lust and fantasy
2 beautiful things!
Good luck in contest!
Missy
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so much lust and emotion in this its just amazing thnku for entering and goodluck
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this was a wellwritten piece. capturing the romance . thanks for entering.
Victoria -
I adore e.e. cummings, and art, and this poem. Thanks for such a brilliant piece of work.
jen.
Edited on May 27, 6:20 p.m. because ''. -
AMAZING!
I will give it a fair comment once I am back from work, till then be well
~Hana~ -
I like the work of arts here, and I could feel the write as I was reading, thanks for sharing, keep up the awesome poetry, best of luck in this contest, for it is now judging...
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"Some thoughts are born to touch...
so deep
so fast
so forever lasting...
as fantasies of craving sensual expression..."
Actually, Rich, I had read this one...yet, I had only congratulated you, shy librarian that I was at the time...
It's beautiful, sensual, evocative, provocative, filled with such yearning as to leave one breathless with awe & splendor...It's a wild & wonderful penning, Rich...Good luck in the contest, my Friend... Jeepers, Scribe...
Wanda
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I think the form works well in what you're saying and displaying in the sort of solace feel of your piece. I even like what the title can mean with perhaps a deeper quality than perhaps what is shown as if there are two surfaces and not just one, perhaps there's more than two.
A good piece that you have written here.
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AWESOME!
Brillient sensual and desriptive great job with this awesome word choices!! i really enjoyed it! good luck in the contest and thanks for entering!
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Marvelous! Beautiful in-depth imagery and wonderful bursts of love pumping through! Very nice! Thanks so much for entering and best wishes!
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Congrats! All the best, ea
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Congratulations...well done, Poet... Wanda
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I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
THIS IS BRILLIANT! OMG! I NEARLY HAD AN ORGASM READING THIS! You said so much without being explicit, you said it tastefully and soooooo sensually. I would not change a thing about this piece either. It is perfection in and of itself. I especially liked the ending, where you said
As the bursting wave
explodes
we are
just so born
alive
again
and
again…
That was the "climax" of the piece. That was beautiful, and it touched my soul. Thank you so much for this entry! Sigrun
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beautifully sensuous! Yet I get a hint of lost love here, and that makes it bittersweet, well done, I wouldn't change a thing about this piece
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awesome!
ooooo more shivers!
verrrrry sensual piece. nice nice nice nice!!!! -
This is excellent writing
and is so exciting
like Viyannarosemarie's orgasm contest
for that is best.
Smoosh Janet
In case that is too cryptic. This is a love contest and you may keep it here but it won't win or place because it is too erotic or you can go to my sister, Viyannarosemarie's, orgasm contest and have a shot. Your choice. -
Awesome.
Wow. I found this amazing, actually, how you managed to say so much, even as you said so little. Vivid, passionate, sensual... it was all of those, and more. Good luck in the contest. -
Verryy well done! Sensual, tasteful; just altogether wonderful! Thank you so much for sharing and for entering in the contest!
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I knwo that i said erotica dosent stand much chance of winning n my contest but now i stand corrected your descriptions are so vivid you say everything without actually saying anything. At first I was a little put off by your form but once i got reading it all became clear and natural to me. great write.
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Good job! Diffrent and I liked it, must read again and all.
I like these two lines....
' Some memories are forever.
Some thoughts are born to touch...'
Good luck in my contest!!
Though you did not put luck of the Irish in your authors box.....we shall see
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This is great, I really enjoyed the visual you created with the word placement. The flow tantalizing!!
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Very lovely poem. Very vivid descriptions that really help bring the poem to life. I feel as if I was there. I like how you formatted the poem, it's different but in the end just helped out the sense of feeling to this. Keep up the awesome writes! Good luck in the contest too!
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