One way in life,
[what is left or never right]
But no lone chance to show
[you do not shimmer but take or emit glows].
Walk in rays or darkness;
Call out to sun or moon.
The shadows send forth coldness,
But light can form cocoons.
Is that what it comes down to,
Bright day against dark night?
Black and white, or hot and cold;
You have to choose, there is a 'right.'
Rainbows on a palette swirl,
[imagination flings and hurls]
But never grow past brush's stroke
[the paper tames, swallows and chokes].
Here I pause to bring a point:
What happened to the grey?
Dusk and dawn, mild and warm,
Everything is born and fades.
And what about our combinations,
the mixtures, variations and types?
Hues and tones, morally right while personally wrong;
the choice is worn but the thought is ripe.
Conscience rules a doer's heart,
[hemispheres of evil to break apart]
But emotions battle the weight of thought
[you must back down, they can't be fought].
Thurber said light comes in twos:
blinding glare or 'illuminating glow.
Beacon or trap, aid or fault,
Light envelopes all that flows.
I, however, shall disagree;
Cannot my soul shimmer in fluctuations glee?
Life allows for wings to spread,
shed cocoons, morph and -pair-less- be free.
Author notes
heh because i wuv you 
ok fine fine because you've read the bulk of my stuff, know my style, and offer decent feedback something which is VERY necessary. like now! i dont like the last stanza... but it's the right idea. the rhyme got me haha. or maybe it's that it's 1am and i havent done homework. hm. oh well.
enjoy 
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Brief explanation (ok maybe not so brief heh):
people always tell me to choose... apparently, i'm very indecisive my problem with that is that in most cases where i'm indecisive, it's because there is more than just "yes" or "no". "maybe" really DOES work sometimes. also, just because you have an opinion doesn't make it right. there are (ironically) two sides to every coin... but that can be read in many ways. there is a right way and a wrong way, but for every wrong way, there are two more parts: an expected consequence and unexpected one. for every unexpected consequence, there is a good and bad way to deal with it. see the cycle here? light is generally seen as something good and yet, in a physical sense, it can burn, cause discomfort, reveal things best kept secret... same way dark is seen as something bad but can allow for peace, quiet, wonder and awe.
and then there are the combinations of things. there may be black and white but if you mix them in different degrees you get all sorts of shades of grey. there may be happiness and sadness but mixed together in all the aspects of life, there is ecstacy, pain, fear, hope, love... the whole range of emotions. they are all just as valid as their bases.
"There are two kinds of light--the glow that illuminates, and the glare that obscures." James Thurber
This was brought on by that quote. At first i totally agreed... and thought it was pretty clever, too! but then i realized there is more to light than a glare and glow. there is warmth, frequency, shimmers... all of which have a purpose and time of use. even glares are useful at times... a glare is what allows for certain things to show up, like reflections.
a trick to reading this again:
*stanzas 1,4, and 7 can be read in two ways - as a whole stanza and as two seperate ideas (line 1 and 3, line 2 and 4).
*2, 5, and 8 are opposites, the "black and white" way of seeing things
*3, 6, and 9 are sort of answers to the opposites, an "opposite to an opposite" sort of thing.
Written February 23rd, 2006
A contest entry
- AP Mistress or Mistresses Wanted!!! by Andy Stephenson.
300 points, ended February 27, 2006, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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well said!! i think you've understood this better than most so far!
walk in the light but dream with the night. thanks!
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i will chase the day forever, and have my brush stroking the light. but too, the darker night i will embrace, to know the dark is to know it can not harm. a good piece here, full of thought and wisdom.
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haah yeah i dont usually do things this structured as you probably know already but it's a challenge. ah yeah... i took piano for 10 years... natural talent, almost perfect pitch. kinda cool. but it seemed to skip several generations lol my dad wanted to play music but is totally tone-deaf... it was interesting. but he tried... and almost got it before quitting.
and of course thanks for reading have a great evening, shancy!
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Girl, you're strapped too tight. Loosen up. Give yourself room to be the great writer that you are. I thought this was great.
Just because I'm not a schooled writer doesn't mean I'm not schooled it what sounds good. Ever hear of someone who is tone deaf but can play an instrument? It's true. I've had years to practice deciding what I like. This is a good job. Your friend, I hope, Shancy. -
haha thanks very different for me... but i thought it was a little... strange couldnt let it be haha.
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Makes much more sense to me now. I was reading past the meaning. Thanks for clearing it up. A very good poem.
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hehe happy thinking
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haha well thank you!
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thanks
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amazing.
WOW. Very, very nice. You've given me something to think about. I love this. Enough said.
God bless, Rose -
great use of symbolism.
There is a sweet and smooth flow this, which i like very much.
i don't know, but this line got me, lol, "I, however, shall disagree;" hehe. it cought me attention.
well done -
Deep. Deep.
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heh well homework is done. finally. i dont usually put studying or homework off like that but i had the urge to write... especially since i havent been writing much lately. there's only so much of variable flow, stresses, and iterations you can take in a day
right so meaning! lol people always tell me to choose... apparently, i'm very indecisive my problem with that is that in most cases where i'm indecisive, it's because there is more than just "yes" or "no". "maybe" really DOES work sometimes. also, just because you have an opinion doesn't make it right. there are (ironically) two sides to every coin... but that can be read in many ways. there is a right way and a wrong way, but for every wrong way, there are two more parts: an expected consequence and unexpected one. for every unexpected consequence, there is a good and bad way to deal with it. see the cycle here? light is generally seen as something good and yet, in a physical sense, it can burn, cause discomfort, reveal things best kept secret... same way dark is seen as something bad but can allow for peace, quiet, wonder and awe.
and then there are the combinations of things. there may be black and white but if you mix them in different degrees you get all sorts of shades of grey. there may be happiness and sadness but mixed together in all the aspects of life, there is ecstacy, pain, fear, hope, love... the whole range of emotions. they are all just as valid as their bases.
"There are two kinds of light--the glow that illuminates, and the glare that obscures." James Thurber
This was brought on by that quote. At first i totally agreed... and thought it was pretty clever, too! but then i realized there is more to light than a glare and glow. there is warmth, frequency, shimmers... all of which have a purpose and time of use. even glares are useful at times... a glare is what allows for certain things to show up, like reflections.
a trick to reading this again:
*stanzas 1,4, and 7 can be read in two ways - as a whole stanza and as two seperate ideas (line 1 and 3, line 2 and 4).
*2, 5, and 8 are opposites, the "black and white" way of seeing things
*3, 6, and 9 are sort of answers to the opposites, an "opposite to an opposite" sort of thing.
hope that helps i'm off to fluids and mechanics of materials, now...
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haha well when inspiration hits... i'll tell you mor about it later today. for now, i need to keep doing homework and go to class.
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I like the symbolism and the rhyme and flow. I like also that it is not erotic or a love poem. I am some confused about the meaning. I would like you to tell me more about it. Then I will read it through again a time or two.
Thanks for entering. I hope you finally got to your homework and also got plenty of rest. -
haha thanks. yeah um i SHOULD have been doing dynamics and/or fluids homework but i did this instead hehe. oh well. got stuck on a few parts with the whole thinking numbers i was SUPPOSED to be doing... which is why i dont really like the last stanza... but hey, it's there for the most part thanks
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nice job to display the concept of pairs.this looked like it took some time to put this together.this isn't your garden variety type poetry.this is that deep stuff that makes you wish that your intellect was set at the same level.
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ACK! what happened?!
poo. those "A"s are supposed to be spaces... i dunno what happened. that's sad. but no it's not a song... just a poem lol thanks.
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good job
Is this a song?
Because then it would explain why all the A's are in this.
I tried reading this without reading the A's Iand I thought it was ok. SO keep up the good work. ANd let us know if your work is a poem or a song. -
haah thanks LOL yes i guess i am! should be fun thanks for reading and commenting
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