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My First Love

I once proclaimed my love to you
But you said just to hide it
I want to be with you ,really, I do,
And my hearts raging with a fire you lit.

"I just want to be friends," you said
And you will go on with your life
Soon you'll leave and be happily wed,
And I'm not that lucky wife.

You have left me here,all alone
Yet you really don't care
So now I'm here on my own,
My heart with none to share.

Author notes

I wrote this piece when I was really upset about something that had happend at school with this guy and me. The poem is pretty much what happened up to the second line in stanza 2.
*Kimberly*
Written February 19th, 2006

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  • grannyeri gold member
    June 19, 2006
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    Sentiments well expressed in these lines - easy to read and understand. You'll look back on this poem one day and wonder what it was all about. Growing up has its fair share of these relationships, on and off again friends, and romantic interludes.

  • childlike faith
    June 1, 2006
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    If we could all learn that lesson well life would be much easier. But sometimes we tend to cling to that that we know we can't have and we suffer the consequences. Sometimes we just have to learn the hard way. Sad but true. childlike faith Thanks for your comments on anticipation. had a great time doing it.

  • lillmissunshine
    March 26, 2006
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    stanza is the pharagraph lines. this one has 3. well thanks for the comment


  • Mila7
    March 26, 2006
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    aw! This is such a lovely poem kim!! I loved it! It so sad and filled with sentiments, (sort of chuckled at the wife part hehe) How you doing btw? My favourite verses where the following:

    "I want to be with you ,really, I do,
    And my hearts raging with a fire you lit.

    "I just want to be friends," you said
    And you will go on with your life"

    and...

    "So now I'm here on my own,
    My heart with none to share."

    beautiful poem!!

    Congratulations Kim

  • Cody Heitzig
    March 13, 2006
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    great

    once again great job.whats Stanza

  • lillmissunshine
    February 23, 2006
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    thanks I know ,but it still hurts
    *kimberly*


  • Sharcu silver member
    February 23, 2006
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    Awwwwwwwwwww, this is so sad! I like the rhyming and everything in it. Very awesome work! But just remember, you are still young. You have plenty of time to find a guy... no rush lol Good poem anyways, though. Flows well and expresses your emotions very well. Keep up the great work!
    --Tim

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