Watching my palm open
curling fingers
you were there
in there
my hand.
a pair of brightly painted wings
thrown from some dark corner
(I'm not quite sure where)
soft and cold
swiftly curled
beautiful love
faded fast
I was that girl
standing in the corner
waiting patiently
for things to come to her
unmoving
unswaying
untouchable, no?
But you touched me
touched me and hurt me
hurt me in a way I could
neither describe
nor hate
good while it lasted
Your wings quickly drooped
I encouraged them to fly away
you weren't a wine that improved with age
selfishly, I pushed you to leave
before you died in my hand
and tainted the only memories I had
of happiness
of beauty
of love.
I was
just a finder
never a keeper
I know too well my fate
You thought I hated you
didn't want you
didn't want your love
Lies, all lies
I wanted it
needed it
but was so afraid of losing it
that I threw it away
Stupid, really
but I am one of those
lovable idiots
just like you
I may not be happy but I can remember
those times when things were sweet
those days when all I had to do
was uncurl my fingers
and see your brightness
there
mine
in the palm
of my hand.
Author notes
I was in such an odd mood, it just fell to me, and I went with it. Who am I to argue with my muse?
This poem is weird. I apologise. But roll on with the next exciting musey adventure, o Muse!
Written February 23rd, 2006
A contest entry
- Free Verse Frenzy (Prewites Only) by poetryality.
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Please...never apologize for BRILLIANCE!
BRILLIANT!
Thank you for this entry and I wish you the best in the challenge! This is Free Verse at its finest!
Much Love & Respect ♥
Renee
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Thank you very much for your kind comments!
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this is very nice imediatly reminds me of 'the british' (go see on my author page) and i quote 'love in the palm of your hand' or something like that anyway. there is some really nice soft imagery that goes with this and i like the use of really faint colouring, though i can hardly read it. nice work
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Thank you very, very much! I really appreciate your comments, as I was not at all sure that this conveyed what I wished it to, however, if it spoke to you, I am very glad.
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This is probably one of my favourite poems by you. In the beginning, it reminded me of myself, and sometimes my heart. Actually, I got a lot of that in it. So yeah, it speaks deeply to me.
I don't know what else I can say about it, though. I'd offer critique, but I love it just the way it is.
~NocturnalOpera
Ps. Applause, ne?
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