I feel this beautiful forever running through my fingertips.
I am about five seconds away from reaching the oblivion that I thought I left behind me.
I have covered myself in innocence
only to find that I am tied
always tied
to the end.
I wish I could float away from this
I want to fly into my fingertips so that I can reach my destiny
but I am left behind
always left behind
I am going to fall
eventually, I will fall into that place that I never thought I would be pushed to.
If I could break the strings of this dream
I would only crash into reality
falling down a rabbit hole
of emptiness.
Author notes
Written February 22nd, 2006
A contest entry
- Picture Inspiration # 11 by Utok Bulinaw.
300 points, ended February 27, 2006, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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beautiful poem
by the way this is "person". I changed my username
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very nice...great emtions shown...
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I like the dreamlike images on this piece but somehow in the end it falls back to reality. Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest! Eris
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Picture Perfect
U are truly amazing but u know that love u and happy anniversary!! GOod luck in the contest this poem is amazing!!WRITE ON -
I don't really understand this or what it's about but you still got a way with words...be waiting for the next one
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I love that line about flying into your fingertips to reach your destiny ... that and many of your other images paint a surreal picture that feels so real in the way it feels when reality crashs into the dream's beauty
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Thanks for your comment,I really appreciate that!
I fell in love with this picture. I collect Salvador Dali pictures, and this reminded me alot of one of his.
I love it when you come in to say hi and read my poems, your awesome, proud to have you as my momma
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just to come back to you with AHA!!! I saw the picture and your poem is a beautiful interpretation. what an eerie picture though...
Jo -
I realize this is a poem written of a picture inspiration, and though I haven't yet seen the image itself, it feels a very dreamy scene, yet almost a tragic sense about it. the first line..."beautiful forever" is just eloquent to me. I love how that slips into such an image of itself of seeming calm and timelessness. the poem has somewhat an Alice in Wonderland appeal about it...not only falling to the rabbit hole, but also the fingers reaching, perhaps for escape when in that "hole," as must have been Alice's feelings when she was shrunk in size and could not escape.
I'm really anxious to see the image to this this poem was written Charna, as though you can't tell, but the poem in itself does provide an image of itself and emotion of something wrong, yet something so very tranquil too.
I hope I'm not all wrong in my reading of this, but it does feel so very much the scene you have set in this poem. Best wishes to you in the contest!
Jo
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