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Top Favorite Treat

A muted purr emanated from Kira's throat as the warmth of their favorite treat trickled slowly across her ashen flesh.

Her back arched when Sharazon's mouth came in contact with her dark chocolate flavored skin.

Sharazon's hands wandered up Kira's thighs, the scent of dark chocolate and flesh intermingled intoxicating him; his top favorite treat.

Author notes

Sharazon is copyrighted to Opaque Beauty.

Sha-zam! Third part of the series!

For part 1: allpoetry.com/poem/1835495
For part 4: allpoetry.com/poem/1838171
Written February 22nd, 2006

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  • ZorroTheFox silver member
    February 22, 2006
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    mmmmmmm if only my dates were more open to the joys of having chocolate flavoring added, but I guess some people just don't like to play with their food

  • Rose Dark Thorn gold member
    February 22, 2006
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    Well, I don't care, so

  • GauArrowny
    February 22, 2006
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    Mmmm. I need to get some of that yet...
    Anyway, getting better. Though in last sentence, I think 'his most favorite treat' sounds better.

  • Rose Dark Thorn gold member
    February 22, 2006
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    Do you need your boo boos kissed better. Perhaps you need more than that...

  • Victoria of Aragon
    February 22, 2006
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    Lmaoooooo...

    I do so adore the comments you get on these, love.

    Do I REALLY need to say it? I adore this. It's hot. It's sensual. IT MAKES ME PROUD TO WRITE SMUT WITH YOU!

    Yerp. ~Nodded; twirled; skipped; giggled; fell on her face; cried for a good half hour; realized no one cared; skipped away.~

  • Sadien Sathantae
    February 22, 2006
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    o.o And in part four...
    They do this...
    And Saderz gets all hot and bothered!
    Yay!
    =D

  • Rose Dark Thorn gold member
    February 22, 2006
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    Actually, extra word that shouldn't be there. Thanks for pointing it out.

  • macandrew
    February 22, 2006
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    A muted purr emanated from Kira's throat as she (?) the warmth

    seems to be a word missing. Short and sweet though.
    John
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