Being human,
I puff up at the thought of criticism.
Yet, the still small voice
Rings clearly above my tantrum.
In final analysis,
It is only my desire for reward
That fuels my fear of discipline.
Still, discipline reaps
Its own reward in forward motion.
What parent
Would stand by with no harsh words
While little ones toddle off a cliff?
I, in perfect form, kick and scream
And insist my way is all I want
When, in reality, it has always been
His way that brought me peace and joy.
What child
Would never taunt a parent
With immaturity and questions?
Still, as children grow and learn,
So does appreciation of
The strong and loving parent.
My God
Is the perfect parent.
He does not deal in reward or punishment
Void of forgiveness and mercy.
Instead, he coaxes me along in joy or pain
And grows me into someone better that I was yesterday
Which is what I truly wanted all along.
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Written February 22nd, 2006
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Wow, the best expression
You got me laughing and thinking at the same time.
It is strange that no matter how old we are we still rebellious and need affirmation (reward) at most times.
Love my chomi
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HOODWINKED !
This is a thoughtful look at harnessing our stubborn wills and submitting to His will and recieving His blessings in the humbling process. This is very well written and inspirational.
Write On dear poet! 
You have been Hoodwinked today by the Poetic Bandits
because WE CARE!
Dennis
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An enjoyable write...
An enjoyable write; parents must remain as parents until the child is fully reared on living on their own; then parents can be friends to their children; wonderfully done. --Joe
Maybe you would like a poem of mine -
"Forgiveness"
The link is: http://allpoetry.com/poem/2309933
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great
So true to life. I can almost see myself in this position more often than I care to admit. Yes God is the best guide we could have to give us the true guidance and correction we need. Keep up the writing, truly inspiring. -
Excellent
As Sam pointed out, you do have a tremendous talent for weaving words. As a publisher's editor, I could find nothing I would suggest changing. I also heartily agree with the vital message this poem delivers. It reminds me of my daughter, 27yo at the time, reminding me of how she used to run down the hall screaming "I hate you!" because she hadn't gotten her way over this or that; then, telling me how, in retrospect, she realized I was a concerned parent and was always there and always fair. What better gift can a parent receive. We just have to understand that it doesn't come until they are grown and have matured.
Wonderful write, poet!
Love and hugs, B♥nnieQ
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This is really nice. I think God disciplines us, well; I know He does for His words says just that...Deuteronomy 8:5
Know then in your heart that as a man disciplines his son, so the LORD your God disciplines you.
You are a very VERY talented writer. Thank you for entering the contest. Great work.
Sam
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This is amazing! I love the angle at which you penned this from and it is an absolute joy to read! I too really like the last stanza and you have portrayed my sentiments as well! Best wishes to you in the contest and thanks for sharing this delightful read!
Blessings
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Thistle, this is so beautifully penned. A joy to read. I absolutely love your fasion statement! Marg
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Very good poem.
Last stanza is excellent.
Best wishes,
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what parent could grant more than is given by god, his commandments and instructions are what we shouod all strive to live up to and like parents he does it without any expectation of thanks, but as any child knows breakthe rules and you will reduce your options, obey them and more freedom opens up, one typo in the last stanza, penultimate line that? should it be than?, an excellent compelling write with a deep message, well done
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we are all children here under the eyes of god. reaching out, we stumble along the road. a greta piece here, very neatly structured.
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