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You are beating a Heart

I've seen a precious one,
Expressing her eyes so deep,
Her fragrance relaxes my soul,
I'm looking for it like it's a part of me.

How am I going to tell her?
Her gentle face keeps flashing in my mind.
Whenever she passes by,
How my world stops for she catches my eyes.

I don't know why something's pulling me,
I don't know if she'll accept the way that I feel.
I am not perfect to fit her expectations,
All that I hold is the way I share love.

The perfect smile that you gave me,
The soft touching of your palm melts me,
When am I going to have it?
I want her sweet smile and warm palms.

I am taking the risk of knowing her better,
Hoping to share the beat of this lonely heart.
Try to glance and you may never know
You are seeing yourself beating someone's heart.

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Written February 22nd, 2006

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  • 2lullabyhaven
    June 11
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    Wow, you made this feel real...thanks for your entry lol

  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    May 20

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    Lovely entry! Thank you! I needed your username to check out your home page and qualify you for the finals.


  • Luckintheshadows
    May 16

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    Wow, what a lovely write, sad, and very touching. I really enjoyed reading this, your flow is really good,

    Thanks for sharing this,

    Luck.

  • Lord Judgment
    May 14
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    i like it very good which poem of mine did u base it off of?

  • violetrose
    May 13

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    Great piece! Definitely something a reader can relate to. The rhythm is really great and flows extremely well. I really like the images you portray. Good job.

  • 2lullabyhaven
    April 29
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    powerfullol
  • nirmal
    February 22, 2006
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    definitely this is the feeling every guy has when first sees his girl. subtle in expression, yet very clear. short and sweet and beautifully written.
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