Lying here...
just simply waiting for that touch
Awakening repetition:
found in sublime motionlessness
of this embrace we've chance upon
Your sighs ignite hidden warmth
beneath and within the gates
My signs reverberate incoherently
to longing not yet sated
Standing here, this body becomes
puddy to that lucidity from being
perched next to him...
Although the scene is being played,
my mind is lost with those echos of
repetition-
Forgetfulness emanate--emotions simmer
just below our sultry dance
Lying here...
simply awaiting for that touch
...but then, we glow brighter
just standing here to this
echo
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Written February 21st, 2006
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A tender tribute to the echoes of love,I felt like sighing too,I enjoyed this,well done,love and light,Yvette
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It's true, being in the presence of someone that you love and desire does reverberate in echos that penetrate into your mind ...and you've presented the concept of oneness very convincingly in this poem. The last stanza emphasizes that as well...\we glow brighter" just being in each other's presence - almost like "quietly burning"...!!! Very good poem - thank you so much for this entry.
~ Nicolette
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ooooo scary man scary
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Subtle, yet deep
I really liked this. I love the repitition of the word "repitition". I love what it's symbolizing. I really loved this piece. It was so subtle, yet deep and gripping. (couldn't think of a better word there. LOL.) But I really loved this piece. Hope you do well in the contest. - cgirl0410 -
I changed my background so we weren't neck and neck with same color. LOL. It was so fitting though in a way. I really enjoy your poem.
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This is pretty. We have the same background color. LOL. Our poems could be sisters or something. I like the echo affect at the end. Good luck in the contest and thank you for the lovely comment on my poem.
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