old man your light wears
morning hill once short now long
each stone calls by name
from youth this thief has stolen
wings of flight~morn from foothills
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once strong~ now my cane
such wearing wakes unseen
thinking you'll join me
for her face when we parted
flows through the meadows below
Author notes
son and father's reply
Written February 21st, 2006
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hello ros...thanks for looking in...I hope all is good with you...larry
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HELLOOOOO!!!!!!!! It always amuses me how youngsters think that they will never grow old.Of course they will.It will creep upon them like a thief in the night to rob them of their youth.What then??? The age old question from the young,Did you ever have a life????, Ros
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Beautiful
So soft and serene the questions asked and answered to warm the days of pending spring. A pleasure to have read this today. Thank you. It seems I took a look about a year ago and still this moved me. Nicely done. ~Pamela
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i liked it cool
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good
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thank you pam...larry
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Beautiful Tanka's. Wonderful theme. There is that lingering nostalgia, and sense of ending on the road long traveled. That recognition when eyes meet, of knowing; father to son. ~Pam
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hello ron...and thanks for looking in...it's always good to hear your thoughts...ALL THE WAY...larry
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all is well
Definite loss and wistful longing that I see here. Quite an image combined throughout both of the tanka, linking them into almost one thought. Good form!
All the best, and “all the way”
Ron ~
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WONDERFUL POEM
Ah these were beautiful tankas. So very heartfelt. Amazing imagery. It is hard to see my daughter as being my equal on many levels even though she is a mother of teenagers herself. Sometimes we have a picture in our minds of our children never growing old like we have. Thanks for sharing. Take care, Sandy
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thank you anna...larry
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Beautiful Tankas. It gives great images. I liked the second even better than the first one though. Together they form a great unity. Well done Larry. Anna.
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thank you liz...for looking so deep within...larry
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These Tanka do create some imagery for the readers to ponder upon. I got the author notes...and I usderstand the first is the son and the second is the father's reply to the son's. I think this is nicely done and very creative.
Youth is stolen by time and the ages....yet the younger ones shall always be held as youthful to those who are older...even as they age themselves.
Keep up the nice work.
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thank you ros...and yes that is one way for this to be read...well done...larry
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thank you lily...your poet friend...larry
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An old man looking back on his life, the knowledge he has gained and thinking of the time he will join his loved one,quite envious but glad that his son has the youth and vigour that he once had.Am I right.Anyway that's the way I read it.Well done Larry, Ros
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Just what I needed before I retire, or attempt to. The flow and imagery you have here has painted such a wondrous picture in my mind that words seem to fail for me where they never seem to fail for you. The picture you selected to accompany your tanka is beautiful and compliments it well. How easily do I relate to the line:
"morning hill once short now long"
Excellent work, as always my dear friend. Bravo!
Lily
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thank you charishma for looking in and your comments...larry
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A nice series of tanka. The second one flows much better than the first. The pivot line, L3, is working well in it, I guess that is the reason for it to be flowing better. I like the imagery in both and the picture.
With good wishes,
Charishma
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didnt understand the author's comments ...
but very beautiful write ...emotions displayed in vivid words ...imprinting a strongly emotional imagery -
thank you niece...
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This is a wonderful tanka dear uncle Larry. I love it.Please keep up posting for I love your pieces.
Shahrzad
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