I wish I were large, strong
as an Amazon, muscled and sleek.
We could wrestle. Just once
I could pin you down, press
your shoulders to the ground,
hold your hands tight above your head,
my knees braced against your chest.
We would sweat, face next to face,
in my nostrils your scent,
your breath against my mouth.
I wish I could hold fast, keep
you down until you cried out
that you were sorry. That’s fair.
You have to be sorry just once,
either then or now.
I would hold you until you say
when. Then I would let you up
and we could be friends again.
Maybe even lovers.
Author notes
Written February 19th, 2006
A contest entry
- simple things by Cat.
300 points, ended February 20, 2006, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Excellent!
I've never seen words quite put together like yours, a different view, through the eyes and thoughts of you. I can truly say, you have such a gift, and are not afraid in any way to use it.
Please keep these superb piece flowing from your poetic soul!
Much love to you and yours, Timothy The Poetic Weaver~
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X ceptional
Its been a while since Ive been on AP, and I had actually forgotten how good some of the deeper writing is... this is one of best Ive read on here. Very moving and as mentioned vulnerable. As a male I would say you don't need to be bigger, if your shorter than he is, go for the gonads...LoL..He'll squeak out I'm sorry...
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I spent from 1989 until 2004 with a man who never once said he was sorry. I can really understand what you are saying here. Except that I would be more likey to want to beat the living shit out of him.
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I don't know what to say, exactly. All I know is that I feel the exact same way about someone. I wish they were sorry, too. Good luck, girlie. Go for the gold.
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i think we all need that sometimes- that apology that is not forthcoming - the one that is so obviously needed but so stubbornly avoided-
I wrote a poem once called- stubborn man
it says simply:
I would forgive you anything
if only you would ask.
we are such a forgiving, understanding lot we females but i think we finally reach a point too-
nice write- well done.
Glad to see this here in my contest.
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well done
WOW! What an amazing write. I really love the imagery. Powerful yet showing a vulnerablity. I know how it feels to be constantly over powered. This is so sexy and beautiful.
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hmm..kind of different from most things I read/write, but very well written.A good way to get the message across.I think it's really good.Great write!
*Rose -
Gosh that's some strong feeling!!! I would normally think this is too explanatory but it's kind of spoken to me. Hence the applause
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Inspirational And Touching
A Wild And Exciting Poem To Read, Detailed Descriptions And The Use Of Imagery Is Excellent. The poem speaks out to me, I believe this poem is very inspirational and unusual..Good Work! -
Funky
Brilliant imagery. It's really good. nice flow as well. didn't quite get the rythm first time i read it but it came easy enough second time round -
oh yeah i can see this, beauiful piece of work I have been to the point this what I would love to do.... Love this
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This is amazing... I loved it..
Your description is so vivid that I cud see the scenes as I read.. everyone wants many people to be sorry.. and everyone wants to be sorry to a lot of people for a lot of things... but we dont.. we are usually afraid of saying such a simple word.. sorry... it takes just a sec and it makes big differences..
Great work
all the best in the contest!
-Neha
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Yeah, that's how it is, alright - ya just want to beat the apology out of him. Not sure it would ever work, but it sure would get the frustration out.
I like the tone of this, the crisp, staccato language. I'd root for you in the contest, but we're competitors this time. Hey, I hope you get the silver!
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This was great. I l ike your style of writing. Well-written free verse always catches my eye. I can definitely relate to this poem. Nice job!
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Now there's a shared fantasy, girl. I do love this thought. So many lovers in my past who could have used a little subjugation. Good to be reading you again. How'ya doin'?
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This was brilliant! I loved this! Also, I am from Florida, that is how this caught my attention (by the author name) anyway this was really good. Is this a poem or a story? oh well, I don't know what this is, but I do know that this thing you have created was worth my time to read, worth your points to promote, and worthy of my applaud.
-Tyler -
Felt the exact same way before and that's why this is such a good piece, because its relatable. Great stuff
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Great write, i can visualize not only the wrestling, but but i can sense the feelings behind it all too!!! I know a person or two who could use this poem Hehehehe, great job and keep on penning!!! -
The passion and angst in this piece. I love it. You took something and make it beatuiful. You want to be stronger and to be the lover that the person you desire, wants. I love this piece.
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grrrrrreat
wow such a great peice with a great amount of feeling behind it.. a great write you have a fabulous talent.. keep writing and thank you for sharing.... nessa -
Yes! I love this! I have honestly felt this way towards someone. You express the desperation. That need, just to hear a simple appology and everything would be ok. Just to hear that person actually give in and say it because you know they know they were wrong... lol ok maybe im going off the deep end here. But good work!!!
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i like this, it's very descriptive and it provides vivid imagery. the up-close-and-personal feel to it makes it seem as though you really are saying something. whoever you wrote this for might benefit from reading it if you wanted to share it. it's that good. i like the end line, it's like an afterthought sort of, and it doesn't detract from the general message. props to you!
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*whistles* that was waaay confusing at first - but the wrestling stuff was SOO flirtatious and i LOVED it!!! LOL, anyway, it rocked and i'd have to say that I'm with you on the wish you would say sorry just once thing.. lol
Monica <3
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