Wrapped,
In the blissful embrace of a hexagonal blanket,
I am not breathing, yet, this is but a fleeting sleep.
It is an audible snapping, joint's cracking,
As I stir from eternal asylum's slumber,
And I burgeon forth from the un-desecrated earth,
Which I lay under.
All about me,
A prison of such dark divinity,
Monotoned souls span the spectrum, while I do not see.
'Tis this sublime lack of stimulation, known as 'graveyard serenity'...
I walk,
Down aisles, 'twixt rows,
Moving like liquid,
Gliding on the tips, of once heavy toes.
And with eyes, that glimpsed another world, while closed,
I saw this cemetery's truth, like no living human ever did.
Roses lining every plot,
While your loved ones sleep...
Some souls wish to leave this spot,
And so for a time opaque, they weep.
But wasting ages, begging to God, is all for naught,
I close my eyes, and listen to the whispers of the graveyard,
Allowing them to impart the never, finite knowledge that they keep.
So as the morning comes to pass,
I must rest again,
Ignorance is bliss,
But serenity can be pain.
And forever shall I walk, in fallen knowledge...
From the time that I was slain.
Author notes
I'ven't a clue it this is good enough. "Death may be the greatest of all human blessings"=Socrates.
Written February 19th, 2006
A contest entry
- Graveyard Serenity by thewriterwithin.
400 points, ended February 23, 2006, 10 entries
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A good freeform piece. i like the language and the last verse in particiular which is strong and grabs your attention well. thanks for the entry.
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jaw dropping
OMG..you have to be the most talented person I know at the moment! I was completely mesmorized by your words. It was beautiful and so well-written! I'm completely stunned..you're so talented.this flowed so beautifully.I'm literally in awe Write on!
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Morbid ---
Thank you so very much for entering my contest. I appreciate the fact that you followed ALL of my rules.
I also want to thank you for entering a NEW write into my contest. I am in complete awe at the moment. This was so stunning! The ending came like a blast of chilling wind. This was brilliant. I loved it.
Thank you for entering,
Good Luck in the contest,
Take Care,
x PatientGrace x
Jasmine
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amazing of course
WOW.. i was totally mesmerized by this.. it made me think of edgar allen poe, the way it was written.. i swear this is one of your best writes i've seen so far, sin.. it was truly incredible.. my favorite part was:
"I walk,
Down aisles, 'twixt rows,
Moving like liquid,
Gliding on the tips, of once heavy toes.
And with eyes, that glimpsed another world, while closed,
I saw this cemetery's truth, like no living human ever did."
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I love the description in this poem. The way you told it as a person in a grave is pleasantly original. I like your work, you're a much more experienced poet than I am.
Okay, see you later, you kick-ass poet you!
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me like! me like! me like! Of course, I'm easily pleased anyway, but this was amazing. I like how you tell this story from a dead person's point of view. Usually people tell these stories from the living's p.o.v.
I guess that's what makes this such a great poem.
now I wanna have a grave contest! lol!
Anyhow, this was great.
Good luck in the contest! -
Woah Michael..God you amaze me...
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Wow...very very dark imagery in there...I'm very pleased with this write. Your diction createst he dark imagery to give the piece more meaning. Good Job, and good luck-Ann
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