On his way out the door
A warrior rested a rose
upon the cobblestone floor
as he said goodbye to his love,
a war far away has just begun,
With goblins and ghouls
ready to be slaughtered,
elves and humans trotted
on their horses proud and brave
as swords were drawn
and horses neighed.
Off he was to go,
and maybe never to return
but the words he whispered
gave her hope,
"Take this rose,care for it well
and before it withers,I shall come home"
For years she cared for the rose,
it never withered,and petals never shed.
The hope in her heart gave her nothing to dread,
One sunny morning,
as dew rested on the grass,
and flowers blossomed,
the wooden door opened,
a tired beat up warrior had walked through the door,
to kiss his wife once more.
"I see you cared for it well,and I kept my word"
They now call that magical rose
the rose of hope,
and to this day it remains intact as their love
grows stronger.
Author notes
I tried my best.
Written February 19th, 2006
A contest entry
- A World Of Fantasy by Painted Warrior.
400 points, ended March 8, 2006, 5 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Beautiful
Thank you for entering my contest! -
Beautiful story, of love and hope.
Poems have multipal jobs which they fulfill: as an outlet for the writer, as an inspiration to the reader and as a record for the future. You have done a wonderful job of entertaining and inspiring this reader. Well done.
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Absolutly lovely descriptive piece of writing here, more like a story than poetry, but great all the same!!! Really well described throughout. I'm glad i read it!!
arah Louise Hudson
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Great poem , coz you painted the opening scene so perfectly .
There is this magical feeling throughout the poem .Maybe that's this thing , they call love. -
yea i tried making it like a story but in poem form or something heh thanks
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This is great touched my heart
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Terrific poem
I love it! It sends a message of love, hope, and wonder to all who read it!!! This is wonderful! Good luck in the contest. Keep up the good work! -
I see you cared for it well,and I kept my word"
They now call that magical rose
the rose of hope,
and to this day it remains intact as their love
grows stronger.
I liked this part the best, because it talks about hope. The rest is also excellent poetry, I just can't condone war. -
Outstanding and magical
Well your best was very good, I love the story, I loved the poem, Magical what a wonderful poem and wonderful story, A knight in shining armor or perhaps a soldier in desert BDU's. I hope they all come home to you all. -
i love the word cobblestone. i used that in a recent pooem. its very descritpive and kinda sounds like cobble stones as well (when you walk on them). so yea.. really good word.
beautiful meanign and message.. written very well
One sunny morning,
as dew rested on the grass,
and flowers blossomed,
the wooden door opened,
a tired beat up warrior had walked through the door,
to kiss his wife once more.
"I see you cared for it well,and I kept my word"
They now call that magical rose
the rose of hope,
and to this day it remains intact as their love
grows stronger.
thats stanza is worded so well.. i love it.
great writing. sorry for the long quote..
jess -
This comes across to me as a story - a fable showing fidelity and hope - rather than a poem. Certain things jar as I read it - neologisms like "beat up" in what seems to be an archaic story, mixtures of verb tense, mixtures of line-length. None of this is wrong in itself, but on the whole it tends to detract from the poetic nature of the piece. Nevertheless, there was a charm to it, and a gentle sentimentality. Good luck in the contest.
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This piece reminds me of something but I can't quite but my finger on it....but I liked this !!!
It is well written and truly beautiful well done xx -
thanks hun
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thanks so much
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congratulations, trophy well deserved. good job with writing this
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congratulations, trophy well deserved, an enjoyable read. well done.
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I want one too!! Certainly a Love Poem with beauty of a Rose.
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This is a beautiful write. Great work, goodluck in the contest.
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This is very interesting, I like how it tells a story. In the beginning it kind of reminded me of Lord of the Rings in a way, I'm not sure what it was, but it did. I hope whoever judges thid piece likes it as much as I did, if they do you're sure to win.
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