We are
as one
entangled
Though our forms embrace
but briefly
Our essence is fused
Flesh flows
leaving us
enraptured
There is
no you
or I
We commune shapes
Speak in silhouettes
Transcend time
Our essence
bleeds bliss
in sacrosanct unity
we are
as one
Patricia Gibson-Williams
February 18, 2006
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Written February 18th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- The Oneness of Two... by Nicolette.
600 points, ended February 23, 2006, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Very lovely poem that is concise and has a dreamy, light quality about it. I liked how you've applied poetic devices such as alliteration, e.g. shapes Speak in silhouettes, bleeds bliss and fused Flesh flows to strengthen the poetic quality of this poem. You've managed to embrace us with your words, making us feel the essence of oneness. Thank you very muc for this lovely entry!
~ Nicolette
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Beautiful work here. Definately shows the "oneness of two" in this . Good luck in the contest. This is lovely.
~Lyrical
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A very well written piece. I liked the repitition of the 'two as one' idea. You really nailed the contest desc. This is such a beautiful piece, with its lack of real rhyme and structure, it is offset from the normality of poetry. I thought the lines:
"We commune shapes
Speak in silhouettes
Transcend time"
Were the best. The descriptions in the lines are wonderful, and the general idea in the three lines is awesome.
Best of luck to you in this contest. -
we are
as one
These four words alone possess so much power. It is the greatest feeling in the world to have a bond so strong with the one you love. Absolutely beautiful. I loved it.
Great write!!! -
breathtaking
wow. this is beautiful. i love it and it gave me butterflies. i love it so much. great write. -
Lovely light and airy touch. No cloying. Just purity.
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