You light my life you are my sun
Forevermore my only one
Beam happiness there is no strife
You are my sun you light my life
Your mile wide smile your loving glance
Enhances much our fine romance
Delivered in exquisite style
Your loving glance your mile wide smile
Your sweet kisses your tender squeeze
My fond desires truly does please
I surely do know what bliss is
Your tender squeeze your sweet kisses
You are my sun you light my life
No doubt the world's most perfect wife
My honey bun my ton of fun
You light my life you are my sun
Author notes
It's Marvelous.Option 1.
Written February 17th, 2006
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A contest entry
- Life always has its twists and turns... by rejected xox love.
305 points, ended September 27, 2006, 4 entries
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What did you think
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This is beautiful
This glorious write certainly lights my life! Such sweet, enduring love, it touches my heart. Thank you so much for entering the contest
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you have a good poem here! i did feel it to be a little repetitive in some parts...all in all good job! thank you for entering my contest and good luck!
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I really enjoyed reading this. what a marvelous piece.
keep up the great work!
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If lines 1 and 2 and 3 and 4 did not rhyme and if lines 1 and 4 were not swapped in each Quatrain it would not be a Swap Quatrain which is an accepted modern poetry form.
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Thank you for entering. This was an interesting piece. There was a little too much rhyming for my liking and alot of the words were repeated over and over. Other than those things it was not that bad of a poem.
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Thank you for entering but I must ask that you put your option # in your author box
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Why cant there be more guys like you and less like satan? No fair. Great poem tho
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you should put metaphors don't use things like your like a sun because it has been used. Put lines no one else can think of to make it more creative.
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i like this form, i will have to have a go at it sometime. this piece is very rhythmic, it reads fast and gentle, very nicely done.
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How wonderful this is! Very nicely penned! Thank you for sharing and for entering my contest!
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