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Be The One



I looked up to a longing sky
Saw your watching midday eye
flannel scarf about your face
Raised my empty hands in place

Let me

be the one,
Me-
Heart-throb to please you
Desperately cease to

be the one
to move with only your lead.

be the one,
me
Songing  the measure
Inhale the pleasure
Of serving you,

Let me
Be the one
You raise to the sky first
Drunken-in love thirst

Be the one,
Whose wrongs are forgiven
As long as I’ve lived in
Your grace.

Be the one
me,
I beg you to choose me
Hold me and use me
Unceasingly yours



            Let me
            Be
                be the one.







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Written February 17th, 2006

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  • Frogzter gold member
    March 29, 2007

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    Forgot to let you know that you have been HOODWINKED! By a member of the Poetic Bandits Group! Have a blessed day!
    Frogz~


  • Frogzter gold member
    March 29, 2007

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    This is simply beautiful beyond words! I can see your faith lovingly sine forth in this piece! A nice thought provoking piece to delight the mind!
    Blessings and best wishes,
    frogz~

  • June-bug
    October 22, 2006
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    Very beautiful write, your faith is very appearent in this piece. If ever a time any should want to be first it should be in the service of the Lord.


  • Nomadic Prince
    March 15, 2006
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    Peachy Keen

    Very "Lord Send Me" additude. very good.

  • poetryisfun2100
    March 2, 2006
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    thanks for the advice!!!

  • fairmaiden1
    February 23, 2006
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    Awesome flow, so smooth and elegant, as is everything you write-fair


  • skullmountain
    February 20, 2006
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    beautifully said

    I felt so warm reading this poem, and every word i felt well written. xxxx jules


  • Sau
    February 19, 2006
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    very well written. this has the magic of free verse and rhythm of interspersed rhyme. gives the words a lot of impact.


  • myrataal silver member
    February 18, 2006
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    Supremely sacred

    Oh my dearest One, how well you verbalized the passion, and sometimes the over-eagerness, to serve the Lord! He is in his Creation, as real as a "flannel scarf" his clouds, as watchful as the sun his Eye -- this Origin, Fountain, Supreme Sight ...

    How very, very well you've spoken my heart -- and all of those who answer to his Invitation of Love.

    Soli Deo Gloria!



    Myra


  • Brooklyn 6 Project
    February 18, 2006
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    Awesome

    I really love this poem! It shows that a person wants to be involved in this other persons life, spiritually, emotionally, and intellectually. A great piece of art here CookieZeal!


  • Sherry gold member
    February 17, 2006
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    Cookie, Lovely beautifully written could it be spiritual or romantic guess it could go either way to your hubby or the Lord. Hope you sing to them both did you make a tune to this with your guitar and some cords? I like to see more lyrics written from you it takes a gift to write them. I tried a few but my style isn't best at lyrics but form. Love you lots, Me
    Edited on Feb 17, 3:43 p.m. because ''.


  • CookieZeal Greeters member
    February 17, 2006
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    Thank you m'dear so much.

  • Ir.muse
    February 17, 2006
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    This is a great piece.I think you'd like to see Ellis's contest.Just take a look at his page.He has a spiritual contest for 1000 points.
    Shahrzad

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