her lace and leather outfit,
falls swiftly to the floor,
her meat is splayed before her,
as she turns to bolt the door.
his anticipation starts to grow,
and she takes him in her hand,
his hardness makes her tingle,
this was not the plan..
her soft warm lips fall on him,
her hunger seems at bay,
her head then raised,she straddles him,
and her hips begin to sway.
she knows its wrong to play with food,
as she takes him deep inside,
but she feels an obligation,
to give him one last ride..
he felt he was in heaven,
but he is so close to hell,
she looked just like an angel,
so he surely couldn't tell.
she arched her back,threw back her head,
her pussy gripped him tight,
as he took a nipple in his mouth,
and gave a sensual bite...
her blue eyes turned to fire,
as she felt his manhood throb,
she had to feel him cum inside,
to get her mind back on the job.
he shudders to his climax,
she feels his warm release,
she pulls his hair,exposed his neck,
then plunged in with her teeth..
she climaxed as she drained him,
of all his life and soul,
she had set out on a mission,
and had achieved her goal.
her blood lust overwhelms her,
and yet she stills feels pain,
that her satisfactions fleeting,
till the hunger strikes again.....
Author notes
Written February 17th, 2006
A contest entry
- 5 Options...enter...now...or suffer! {Prewrites now allowed!} by vampireblood.
430 points, ended April 30, 2007, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Hardcore Stuff (18 and older) by Ice Queen.
750 points, ended June 29, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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I love it, good job!
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mm makes me wish i had my own dark lover stalking me.. hehe
its a terrific sexy dark poem !
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This was a good piece, however I will have to DQ part 2 because its Erotica. I specifically said in the rules no erotica, and you didnt put in the option. I let it slide in your other poem, but as long as there are 2 differnt rules you didnt follow I will have to DQ it. Sorry. Good luck with part 1 in the contest.
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I adore this. You have such a way with words.
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very well written
Very erotic. I enjoyed the images your words produced for the reader. I was surprised by the Vampira. lol
Ethereal Melody
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This is a wonderfully woven piece of writing. Very erotic and descriptive. I must say, it conveys a raw and dangerous pleasure.
Dimitri -
good
he felt he was in heaven,
but he is so close to hell,
she looked just like an angel,
so he surely couldn't tell.
A very powerful, descriptive poem. You did a good job with this. -
LOVE IT! I think this is a great poem! Your a great poet!
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thank God for air conditioning because this write was making me sweat and now i have to tke a shower great write keep doing well
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First of all, I would like to apologize for not judging this contest sooner. The reason for the delay is that I became very ill and was not able to even sit up long enough to read a poem. But now that I have recovered I will be judging the entries as fast as possible.
I love vampires! Leather and lace, lust and blood... you really captured the essence of the Children of the Night. This a great write that combines sensuality with darkness in a delightful way!
Good luck on the contest!
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Extrodinary!! I loved this one I love it!! I am dying to read some more of your poems like this. This is the best poem I think I have read in days. This poem sure does get a persons blood pumping for need and want. Your poems are just fantastic. Where do you learn to write like this. I will for sure read some more of your poetry.
-Juarez
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My, my, my. What a jolly good job you did there, that was very sexy and dark indeed. A very well done. It's good because it speaks for it'self without over explanation. At first i din't get it, I thought she might have been straddling a juicy T- bone steak, lol. But no seriously a good all rounder.
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awesome description for a vampire. great poem. its nice to see that you put it in two seperate poems so as to not lose the reader. great job.
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"she climaxed as she drained him,
of all his life and soul,
she had set out on a mission,
and had achieved her goal.
her blood lust overwhelms her,
and yet she stills feels pain,
that her satisfactions fleeting,
till the hunger strikes again....."
You've done an amazing job on this!! It's so dark and beautiful. Good luck and thanks for entering! -
Hey mister! This is great! I always love your excellent part 2's to your excellent part 1's! I havent been on here for a while to say hello, so Hi! How have things been going for you? Your writing is still as wonderful as ever I see! I want you to keep them cumming ;oP
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Words cannot describe.You are one of the best poets I have thus far come across. I love your subjects. The poems themselves are live stories that you become entranced in.
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flippin eck you got a lotta gold trophys all deserved. x Fantastic and imaginitive, makes powerful reading. Brill Doug
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Darling... take me to the park on a leash... and I will bark for you into the velvet dawn x
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wow! this is sizzling! i think this is sexy as hell and yummy! blood lust there is something rather attractive about that term! please teach me to write erotica tastefully mine always reads like porn!!!! this baby is hot hot hot! keep em coming! C xx xx xx xx xx
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mmm naughty dougie
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also good luck in the contest
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exceptional
Exceptional write and i feel honored to have good comments from a poet such as yourself! Part 1 had me at the edge of my seat and part 2 left me nothing but pleasured and im hoping for a part 3(trying to be subtle). again your write and your talent is Exceptional -
Vampire-girl! Tahnk you for entering the contest, I'll try to have it judged by tonight.
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I forgot to add, I loved the first stanza.
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well my friend i decided to read this one again. must say that it still struck me as one the most sensual writes that i have ever read, good job luv
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won me
got everything this poem and then some.loved it am looking to read more of your work. -
i love it, you always make the characters in your poems sound so real, so beautiful at times. you amaze me more each word i read. great write dougie, hope to see you soon
your friend
emily
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AMAZING
ABSOLUTLY amazing...I loved it. I'm speachless..great job! -
I love it. Simply beautiful and breathless.
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MAGNIFICENT
AWESOME HOW VERY EROTIC AN DARK AT THE SAME TIME, YOU HAVE DONE A VERY BEAUITFUL JOB WITH WORD PLAY AND TELL OF THIS VAMPIRE THATS A MAN EATER IN MORE WAYS THEN ONE! ENCHANTINGLY BEAUTIFUL!
..........ENNOVY
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wow! Such description. I never read a vamp poem quite like that before. Erotica vamp poems....hmmm..
nice poem. I enjoyed reading this piece. Good luck in the contest, altough i don't think you need it. Very nice.
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Wow.
he felt he was in heaven,
but he is so close to hell,
she looked just like an angel,
so he surely couldn't tell.
Makes me think of "angel in disguise".
This is very sexy and racy. Love it!
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I love how you mixed erotic with kinda scary, very good comparison and all in all it was very good.
<3 Lace -
Very sexy, i loved it. Think i just creamed myself. I wish a vampire lady would do that to me, except i don't have any 'manhood' and i don't exactly want to die
Very good uncle D, your work gets me wetter each time xXxPurexXx
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juicy
You did wonderfully my friend. I'm so glad you wrote something new. No words get me so moist as yours seem to do. -
Sexy hot. Some wicked stuff right there. Love it. Very nice rhythem. Excellent my horny friend. xoxo. Tori
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I printed all of these out as well!! i loved them all!! so...so... orgasmic!! YES perfect word for them!! You did a great job as usual!!
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that was orgasmic, nicely done!
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oh man, wicked wicked hot, ryhme scemes ok, but the words over ride it and make it all just awesome. man, i wanna be a vampire and eat my lovers. good deal
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Very nice - sexy....I like this one better than the first. Love the last lines
and yet she stills feels pain,
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VERY SEXY AND EROTIC , I WOULD SAY YOU STRUCK GOLD ONCE AGAIN !!!!
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VERY good write. very nice. wow. i dunno what to say. wow.
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A most excellent dark and sultry write! Wow! Very well done! Pen on, poet!
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Love vampires, this is hot... thanks for sharing. haha
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wow, how um....well, I'm speechless!!! This is oh so exciting!! I havent even read part one!! Great write!
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i agree vampires are sexy they are succubus so they are supposed to be. You are a good writer
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Mmm odd. But good. Vampires are so sexy. Loved the line "He felt he was in heaven but he was so close to hell" Great write keep it up
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full of passion and imagary great writing
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Well, another job well done
I liked this one more than part 1, I think you may already know why 
Anyway, awesome job and keep it up hun
~steph~
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