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Tears Torn from the Silent Sun

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Tears torn from the silent sun, dying, faded in darkness
ending sudden sadness misery deadly games played brink of shattered pain
weak with despair numbness undone by death's raging alone, alone so long
festering the lonely holes where fallen, bottoms broken empty jagged 
lost forever crying depression sadness...
 
Pulled apart tears blinded blameless light ripped abandoned
destroyed vanished in depths endless rows of scars
lost forever a noiseless heart dragging through streets
scorched and tortured shrieks trails of inward pain
unseen blood dripping drowning crimson pools day after day
crumbling, ceasing to exist, screaming wrongs occupying minds 
missing in insanity it creeps in carrying the tears far away 
to a distant, wintry slope slipping into a tormented loneliness
the coldness cannot be ignored...



 

So, what of all this?
No one cares about these tears, so sorry in their confused voiceless war
it is too late now, within their nightmare lies the hate and emotions gone unheard
unraveling thread by thread, afraid to sin again, the worst fears blued with dejection 
torn apart with a horrible stabbing and trapped in crime after crime that leaves a trail of mistakes
which grip the shocked and bursting heart... the doctor has not been called
and no one sees the tears, the hurt is just too great...



Moaning, ragged drizzling thunder, tears snuffed the downpour a dim and obscure end
tattered unrelinquished rain of desolation and despair in a melancholic gray.
They mix in a lethal fray of toxic anger a verge of devastation to all who pass
crushed horrified in the gloom, traumatized by new aches stinging throbbing
falling feeble in a fragility of shadowed despondency.

Tears untied traveling, another fatality, barren statistics
casualties taking their paths to furious and violent burials
anxieties at the threshold cracking for so long, so long 
tearing at diminishing at edges wreaked by naked unfeelings
beaten down dropped sizzling in the heat of anguish concealed
sightless fatal guilt slashed deserted wants untasted 
discarded covered and crumbling within forsaken and derelict heartbeats

one by one smashed and damaged in tears of dejection
echos of sobs evaporating in stained pits
of continuous wounds punctured with hopelessness
an eternally terrified and fearful perpetuality
boiling weeping tears seized by wild roastings
infinite searing shaken blisters empty grasping afflicted with a growing distance...



So these tears, fallen into a defeated agony
and transformed into uncontrollable cleavers drenched in blood,
swinging wildly and sinking, disintegrate in the errors of collapsing perceptions
and clenched in a tight-fisted blackness muted with deteriorating filth,
everlastingly crushed and ground by the shrieks of one's own misperceptions
are tasted by no one but their creator.

Nevertheless, this is a good example of
the upset and dazed grabbing at vacant, petrified longing desires 
overlooked in the remote absence of missed rendesvous and forgotten calls
tears chilled in the frost and iciness of a failed meeting and absent memories of what was once good
the winding trips downward now plagued by isolation and sodden with loneliness...

Trying to disregard the coldness in bitter, arctic regret and remorsefulness
these tears are perplexed with seclusion and an unexplainable mystified bewilderment
that conflict with their confrontation with a dreadful abhorring self-loathing 
carrying all that is detested and useless within their divisions of indulgences
disguised by the offenses of a troubled soul
and finally found clinging to the revulsions of the stunned and injured aspects of this clutching existence
in their primal form. Tears. Silent tears.

 

 





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Written February 17th, 2006

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  • -ButterflyCuts-
    May 20, 2006
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    wow. incredible work.. very long..
    but so well written,.. amazing. i loved the title. really great.
    all my love and thanks again for your help
    jess


  • getsbetter
    February 21, 2006
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    Congrats Wbiro, you did a beautiful job on this poem. I even give you a applause after the contest my friend, GETS again congrat, you deserve it.


  • poetryality silver member
    February 20, 2006
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    No need to worry dear son, the contest host loves the work.

    It was hard for me to read because today is just not the day. I just came in from a cousin's funeral, she died of cancer at 48. The thing I can attest to is; it is akin to my mood, because at this very moment I am hating cancer with a vengence, and I do feel aggrivation, and discontent in as much as I could read.

    I do promise to come back, and give it a thorough reading very soon. Sorry!

    Your Honorary Mom
    Renee


  • wbiro gold member
    February 20, 2006
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    thanks for the glowing comment... you revealed a few things that needed improvement!


  • No deliverance
    February 20, 2006
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    Moaning, ragged drizzling thunder, tears snuffed downpour dim and obscure end
    tattered unrelinquished rain desolation despair a melancholic gray.
    They mix in a lethal frayed toxic anger verge of devastation to all who pass
    crushed horrified in the gloom, traumatized by new aches stinging throbbing
    falling feeble a fragility of shadowed despondency.

    *******
    one by one smashed and damaged in tears in dejection
    echos of sobs evaporating in stained pits
    of continuous wounds punctured with hopelessness
    an eternally terrified and fearful perpetuality
    boiling weeping tears seized by wild roastings
    infinite searing shaken blisters empty grasping afflicted with a growing distance
    *******

    the upset and dazed grabbing at vacant, petrified longing desires
    overlooked in the remote absence of missed rendesvous and forgotten calls
    tears chilled in the frost and iciness of a failed meeting and absent memory
    the winding trips downward plagued by isolation and sodden with loneliness...
    ****



    JUST AMAZING!
    GREAT GREAT GREAT PIECE.
    ACTUALLY TOO AMAZING FOR THIS CONTEST!!
    JUST AMAZING!


  • wbiro gold member
    February 17, 2006
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    Let's see, that's five for, two against... as for me? I know it needs more work to be easily read all the way through... the individual images are fine, they piece as a whole needs some coordination... the naysayers were perhaps looking for an emotional piece, and this is an abstract 'mental' piece conveying images rather than feelings...

  • Dross zero
    February 17, 2006
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    sometimes many words say nothing and few words say the most...

  • Lb
    February 17, 2006
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    Great!

    Wow! Don't shorten it. Sadness is intensely gripping, as is this poem. Keep writing.

  • lightVdark
    February 17, 2006
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    Cool !!! like the poem and love the scheme !!!!!!!!!


  • EPoD
    February 17, 2006
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    Epic

    No no no. Don't shorten it. Its great the way it is. It was intense yes I agree but it was a good intense. It made me think and I did indeed enjoy it. I loved the line "Moaning, ragged in the drizzling thunder, tears snuffed in the downpour of a dim and obscure end"

  • Marmalade red shoes
    February 17, 2006
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    Tears untied, they travel like just another fatality, statistics,
    casualties taken to a furious and violent burial

    Wow! This was long and intense - esp over my morning coffee and marmalade on toast...but Wow! Tell me more about this what inspired this...?

    I think it would benefit with shortening as it is so intense and definately a mood shifter! But a grand effort!


  • Lady Lacrymosa
    February 17, 2006
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    incredible...your words hit me like bricks (in a good way) the way that your message is conveyed has a way of striking me into a speechlessly dedundant state of sheer bliss! this was fantastic

  • Ar60
    February 17, 2006
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    Too long, at first glance, then just words upon words...So, much said with nothing gained...

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