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Heartbroken(Swap Quatrain)

Why did you go you broke my heart
I can't stand it when we're apart
Why was I the last one to know
You broke my heart why did you go

You said you'd stay forevermore
With years of bliss for us in store
Nothing could make you stray away
Forevermore you said you'd stay

Alone I be so sad so blue
Without you don't know what to do
No euphoria, ecstasy
So sad so blue alone I be

Is there a chance will you come back
So once again we'll be on track
To rekindle our sweet romance
Will you come back is there a chance.

Author notes

Billbard.
Written February 16th, 2006

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  • Daxteriana
    July 20

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    Hmm. This was interesting. I liked this. The emotion was strong yet the imagery lacked a little. Other than that, it was good. Good Luck!

    Dax



  • ChelseySmile
    January 3
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    Nice flow.


  • gigglesalot
    January 2
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    can you please put your name in AN? thanks =]


  • Blooming Poet
    February 21, 2008
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    Is the option in your AN for my contest


  • Blooming Poet
    February 21, 2008
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    wow, amazing


  • AngelEyes13
    April 12, 2007

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    I love this poem. Thank you soo much for enteirng my contest and wonderful job on making the background match your poem.


  • SuiCiDaLKiSs
    March 19, 2007
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    waaah!

    i love the flow of the poetry..well best of luck to you..i loved it...


  • ForgottenMemories
    March 14, 2007

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    great

    this is a great poem. I can feel the sorrow of a heartbreak in your poem. you rhymed well too, great write. good luck in my contest xxShadowEaterxx


  • Beautifully Poetic
    November 1, 2006
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    nice ryhimg...and thank you alot for entering my contest, it made it a bit more difficult judging but thank you it was enjoyed"


  • VanGoghNights
    August 31, 2006
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    Enjoyable

    Very nice poem!!!!! I thoroughly enjoyed this, thanks for sharing it and for entering my contes!! Good Luck!
    ♥Savina♥
    Thanks for reading the rules


  • esroddo silver member
    July 29, 2006
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    wonderful

    great i liked it very much comes to the point with out a lot of words and you seem to see the event as you write. very wonderful


  • MLMorin
    July 11, 2006
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    Congratulations on winning the silver! Marg


  • Bleeding Fairies
    July 10, 2006
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    wow, i relate to this 100%. its a great poem. thanks for entering and goodluck


  • grannyeri gold member
    February 20, 2006
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    Congratulations for winning silver with this poem.


  • individuality gold member
    February 16, 2006
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    aye, it is an improvement in my opinion to have the rest of the piece there with that first stanza. an enjoyable read.

  • individuality gold member
    February 16, 2006
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    i like this, short but good, it would be nice to see a couple or so of these making up a longer poem but this still stands good as it is.
    a good piece of poetry. thank you for entering and good luck.

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