something happened today...a feeling a something was lost
its forever gone, I can feel it missing
I'm trying to think why I feel so empty
it wasn't someone around me and it wasn't my life
I know it has to deal with you dad
I think back to the times when I was happy with you
when you could look at me and I could look at you
that was when you were my dad and we were family
help me to erase the pain please
help to live free of it
I'm slowly letting it all unravel the way I felt
when you weren't there every time I wanted you to be
when I would look up and not see you there anymore
its all coming back to me bits and pieces
I cant take the pain any longer JUST TELL ME WHAT IT IS!
I know what I have lost now, its gone forever now
the feelings I feel now or worse than ever before
I lost my respect, I lost my love, I lost my everything
I lost everything for you now dad
As you sit there and live your life without me
You may think that I feel bad for you but I don't
I just lost you and you lost me
you are nothing now because when I say your name now
I feel nothing I have lost it, lost it all
BECAUSE OF YOU
Author notes
the thing I have lost in this poem is not my dad and not anyone dieing but my feelings inside for him died
Written February 16th, 2006
A contest entry
- Day at the Morgue by HunteroftheDusk.
600 points, ended March 2, 2006, 16 entries
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Damn, do I know that feeling. With me and my dad it was because I didn't turn out to be the little girl he always wanted. I'm a tomboy not a little princess. I don't think he could deal.
Anyway this poem is really well written. I love the lines:
You may think that I feel bad for you but I don't
I just lost you and you lost me
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Wow, this was amazing, I loved it completely. I don' tknow how to say what I think of this poem because I cannot grasp the perfect words, I can relate and yet.. I can't... it's confusing for me.
Anyways, go you! Awesome write!
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I love it, you really describe the pain of loss well.
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I like this piece especially when you tell your dad that you didnt just lose him he has lost you and it is a very well written emotional poem
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I am sorry that you feel this way, but you have made this piece very powerful! It is full of your emotions and what they once were, the truth, and the numbness caused by the truth. I am lucky to have parents that I trust and can talk to like friends...though they can be a bit embarassing and overprotective. I am thankful that they are that way...some of the time. May you and your father resolve whatever problems are blocking such a relationship of father and daughter! Keep up the great work and good luck in the contest!
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