Call me Adam,
For you are my Eve.
Were you born from my rib?
Are you all that I love?
I dance through our Garden of Eden
And you are in all the leaves
And all the earth.
To love you is to love everything I want,
Everything I am,
Everything I am not.
Should I savor a taste of forbidden fruit?
Call me Napoleon,
For you are my Josephine.
Do you know how I love?
Are you my haven from all that I know?
Everything I do in this place, in this world, in this life,
Is for you,
Or is it for me?
To love you is to love everything I want,
Everything I am,
Everything I am not.
Should I drink from the fountains of the world?
Call me Gatsby,
For you are my Daisy.
Do I covet you?
Are you that which I worship?
I flip through the scrapbook of our memories
And see only your face,
Or is it mine?
To love you is to love everything I want,
Everything I am,
Everything I am not.
Should I follow the light of your dock?
Call me by name,
For you are my muse.
Do you know how I need?
Are you my reason for happiness?
My mind but hoards each memory of bliss, for
It is you,
It is we.
To love you is to love everything I want,
Everything I am,
Everything I am not.
Should I wait for you around every bend?
Should I forget,
And reclaim myself?
Just whisper my name,
And I realize my dream.
Author notes
i love the Great Gatsby, so i had to be inspired by it. i love gatsby and can completely relate to him, so here is my poem. enjoy.
Written February 15th, 2006
A contest entry
- Broken Heart by Blooming Poet.
300 points, ended July 31, 2008, 118 entries
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Great imagery and great use of words here.
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You are a hopeless romantic and I fell in love with this poem. I love the last line, it has so much hope. Truly inspiring. Aimee
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There were moments during this charming poem when I was there, darling, unfortunately not enough. Some lovely ideas... but grab it by the balls sweetie x
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This is a great poem... i love the way you've compared your love with famous couples. The way that it is structured also brings it all together. Keep up the good work.
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Great poem. To compare your love to such well known couples such as adam and eve or napoleon and josephine, is just a great effort in beng a good poet.
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I liked the format, how you put a long line at the beginning (most times) for the question, and then expanded on that in shorter lines for the rest of the verse. Also the word order here "My mind but hoards" is pretty cool, different. Nice imagery, I especially found "And you are in all the leaves" quite moving. Great how you used the recurring theme of famous lovers (Napoleon and Josephine, Adam and Eve etc.), nice work.
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Very nice poem you have written. It needs nothing. It has a xlnt flow and rhymne to it. Beautiful job my friend, GETS
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Excellent
I enjoyed the comparisons.Finding the right one can be quite the task thats for sure.This is a lovely poem.The background gives it a great touch.And the dream is well dreamy. *o) -
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I really like this as written. I for one appreciate that you didnt try to hide what you feel and sense behind words which you need to use. This piece tells a wonderful story and takes the reader through a ride of your truest emotions. Very well done. -
I also like the comparisons in this poem it made for a great write
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I like your allusions to Adam and Eve, Napoleon and Josephine, and Gatsby and Daisy. These are very good stories/historical events to relate too. I also enjoyed Gasby very much and felt akin to him as well. I like the concept of this piece, but the metaphors were much too obvious. Maybe you could rework them so that there is a bit of a play on words or some other cleverness. Good job though.
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great use of words and comparisons. I enjoyed this very much a very clever write
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Wow I loved this poem. I love repeation in poetry and this is awesome. I am looking forward to reading more of your writing.
Loretta
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