Verse 1:
She wakes me up in the morning
With her thoughts in my head all around
Wishing once more to look in her eyes
To hear her voice a beautiful sound
Chorus:
It hasn't begun and who knows when
Only that it is within
I'm nearly blind and it's cruel to see
The precious lives and busted dreams
Verse 2:
Everyday she passes me by
I long to hold on to her hand
Walking in hand day after day
Wishing that this would never end
Chorus
Verse 3:
I wrote a letter to tell how much I love her
And I wait for a reply
But it seems like waiting
For the world to touch the sky
Many years have come and gone
And I still long to look in her eyes
But I'm blind and I can't see
My precious life and busted dreams
Chorus
It hasn't begun and who knows when
Only that it is within
Now I'm blind and I can't see
The precious lives and busted dreams
Author notes
I got this from Iris again and Jack Mannequine's "The Mixed Tape"
It's true I did write her a letter in the form of 2 dozen roses and a card for Valentines Day and I have yet to hear word if she actually received them or not. So I still keep on waiting.
Verse: C, G, F
Chorus: G, D, Em, C9
Written February 15th, 2006
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The flow of this was very well done. it was easy to read and picture, but it wasn't totally obvious at the same time.
The progression from nearly blind to blind was well placed. It really shows a true dedication and passion.
Thanks for entering. -
good
She wakes me up in the morning
With her thoughts in my head all around
Wishing once more look into her eyes
To hear her voice a beautiful sound
i really like this. the only thing is that in line three i think it would make more sense if you did this: Wishing once more TO look...
other than that it is pretty good. i knew it would be.
It hasn't begun and who knows when
In the land of Neverland
I'm almost blind and it's hard to see
The fragile lives and shattered dreams
this is so precious. and i certainly wish someone had given me even a dandelion. that was sure sweet of you. it has been so long since i got any flowers from a guy that i would write the letter for him.
you never cease to amaze me with your writing. i like to collaboration we did. you caught me with that poem alone. -
great write.
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This kind of meanders. Not quite straightforward like I expect from you. Interesting though.
Good music you wrote this off of. I'm sorry if you haven't got a reply yet. Keep waiting, surely there will be a reply.
Good write -
Excellent
This is BEAUTIFUL! You really did a great job in making the lyrics your own. How very thoughtful. I hope you don't have to wait long. good luck in the contest.
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