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Meat Grinder

Cracking Snapping Bones
Skin Shreds From Disjointed Limbs
Meat Grinder Feasts Again

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OMG - this was a gory contest and this is my first attempt at Haiku - it could only happen to me!!!  Don't hold it against me - PLEASE?????
Written February 15th, 2006

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  • HopelessScribbles gold member
    February 26, 2006
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    this was indeed a scary thought but nicely written and expressed.. thanks for sharing..Linda

  • Brokenpen
    February 26, 2006
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    awesome write

    wow this was impressive. well writen .. thank you for shearing your words with me. keep on writing.


  • Avalanche.Echo
    February 15, 2006
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    Well,I liked it...but your syllable count is slightly off.The last line needs to be shortened a syllable.Please try again and re-enter!


  • chasingtheday gold member
    February 15, 2006
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    ar the peaceful air of nature in a haiku and eeek the meat grinder's got my leg arghhhhhhh - darn it it could have caught my wooden leg at least.