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Thanks a bunch

Why am I so hollow?
I thought you should know
Cause it’s all your fault
See I had the open wounds
And you poured in the salt
So thanks I guess I owe you one
But how can I ever repay you
For all damage you have done?

“You’re trying to come up with answers
That even in your wildest dreams you wouldn’t know
And in the process you're hurting me
As you let me drown in my own sorrow
But since you think you’re so right
You’re going in blindly
Trying to find yourself a light
And I’m stuck in between
Getting hurt all thanks to you
And all the stupid things you do”

Well hey, I’m sure you had your reasons
You were only doing what you thought was best
But can’t you see how wrong you are
Can’t you give this all a rest
Don’t you see the pain you cause
From trying your best to protect me
Please open up those eyes of yours
Maybe then you’ll be able to see

“You’re trying to come up with answers
That even in your wildest dreams you wouldn’t know
And in the process you're hurting me
As you let me drown in my own sorrow
But since you think you’re so right
You’re going in blindly
Trying to find yourself a light
And I’m stuck in between
Getting hurt all thanks to you
And all the stupid things you do”

I can’t take this anymore
It’s now become way too much
I need to leave this behind
And escape your stupid rules and such
If only you could just open your mind
Then you’ll be able to find
There’s nothing here for you to ‘fix’
Cause I’m okay just like this
So I'll go and leave nothing but a kiss
As I tell all the things you need to know
Like how...

“You’re trying to come up with answers
That even in your wildest dreams you wouldn’t know
And in the process you're hurting me
As you let me drown in my own sorrow
But since you think you’re so right
You’re going in blindly
Trying to find yourself a light
And I’m stuck in between
Getting hurt all thanks to you
And all the stupid things you do”

Author notes

Okay, okay, this is crappy I know but it's a letter (in the form of a song) so it doesn't have to be good. It's just to get how I'm feeling down on paper. This is to my dearest mother.
Written February 15th, 2006

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  • mydearest apologies
    September 19, 2006
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    this is a great poem. its reallly deep. you put your thoughts very well on paper


  • CapturedMoon
    February 15, 2006
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    Baby...this is amazing. I know I say that alot about your poems, but this one is...breathtaking. Its stunning. I love it. I don't know what else to say. It's....its wow.


  • Scotlass
    February 15, 2006
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    Not crappy at all - you are expressing your emotions honestly and there's nothing to critisize there!!! My only problem is that you may want to lighten the text color as it is a little dark and strains the old eyes a tad whilst trying to enjoy your words. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Keep writing.