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Unconditional Love

I know I do not think
within your parallel lines.
Inside my mind,
my world in your world,
I am alone.

But being surrounded
by my seclusion,
does not mean
I do not know beauty.

My rainbows are not black,
my music cries no tears,
my flowers are unblemished,
and my bread is pure.

When I feel your touch,
I feel it
for what it is,
skin on skin.

My soul, my spirit;
circular vertical shadows,
and if I smile
into your eyes,
it is with my love
that I love you.


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Written February 15th, 2006

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  • melphleg gold member
    June 28, 2008

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    Not sure what this has to do with motherhood, autism or poverty. It reads like a love poem to me. As a love poem it is very nice and uplifting.


    • sarajaneUK
      June 28, 2008
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      This poem is concerned with love and thoughts a child with autism may have for his parents.


  • individuality gold member
    December 9, 2006
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  • MollyFlogginz
    August 26, 2006
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    so beautiful. wonderful poem, thank you, so much, for enterring my contest.
    <3
    molly


  • JadedxPassion
    July 14, 2006
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    This Is Very Different And In The Most Positive Way! I Enjoyed This, Very Different View, And Wonderful Choice Of Words And Imagery. Best Of Luck.


  • CrazyBeauty
    July 9, 2006
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    great job


  • burdened
    May 14, 2006
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    this is beautiful, well done, i love the imagery and the layout of the stanzas. It is interesting but lovely and beautiful. thanx for entering sand good luck in the contest. X


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    May 8, 2006
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    i don't know why the feelings in this pome seem familar, you did a great job on this, i like it, thanks for joing the contest and keep it flowing good luck


  • arry2007uk
    May 5, 2006
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    Great work, the creme de la creme of your work thus far. This piece is magical thank you for sharing it with us and I hope to see more poetry like this because it really is gorgeous!


  • sarajaneUK
    April 27, 2006
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    Indeedy, and i agree with simplicity and unconditional, but its finding your opposite number, thats the big pain in the ass.

    And sometimes, the quirky little eccentricities that one finds attractive initially, turn into irritating habits...but i guess in that instance, it was prolly not love at all anyway. sighs.

    Smirks at the perks, and wonders about the good book in bed!


  • April 27, 2006
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    i like this. shortlines and what. its bittersweet. unconditional love is the thing. its about loving someone for their faults as well as their defaults. acceptance of a persons soul and not necessarily their self.

    i wrote an odd poem one time called Washing Cans. its about a woman i used to know. alot of ppl didnt get what i was getting at in it. but she was a fanatic for washing cans. go to the market come back and wash all the cans. as a male i guess i didnt concieve of this that ill eat off the floor if you let me.

    and i was sitting there one morning drinking coffee and just watching her scrub away on these cans and i was thinking jees you silly woman you.

    and it was a moment.

    and she turned around and looked at me because i know she felt my eyes on her. and the morning light was coming in the window just right and she had a sundress on and she just smiled softly at me....

    god i was smitten with that moment. like an ephinay. and remmbered exactly why i loved her like i did. and that i actually liked the fact she washed cans and did all the quirky things she would do sometimes. because that is what made her unique. simplicity is sincerity sometimes, well all the time if you ask me.

    to me, thats the most important thing in a relationship. simplicity and unconditional love like that.

    rather i to lay in bed at night and share a good book than go out and paint the town red.

    of course painting the town red has its perks too sometimes.

  • LoverboyDreamer
    April 14, 2006
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    B-E-A-Utiful

    This is a great piece, to see beauty from a secluded mind is a wonderful thought, it touches me one of my best mates has autism, he will love it. Thanks for pointing me here it truely is a beautiful piece!


  • poet2angels gold member
    April 2, 2006
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    Lovely poem. I have an autistic son so this did touch me deeply....Good luck in the contest!...Lynda
    Edited on Apr 02, 4:41 because ''.


  • individuality gold member
    March 29, 2006
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    this is very good - i haven't really thought about that before, being trapped in the mind, not in this way anyway. a good poem. thanking you kindly for entering, good luck to you. spill ink and twist me into the shape of love.


  • HinsleyFord
    March 24, 2006
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    Hi! I am new to this site and have been scanning poems. I really was struck by this one in many ways - the imagery is strong and the words bold and unflinching. Thank you!

  • petty foibles
    March 23, 2006
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    i am not sure if this is told from the voice of a mentally handycapped person or one who loves a mentally handycapped person trying to cope with the fact that the person they love doent understand that love as many of the mentally challenged people i know dont know what any emotion is nor how to express it.


  • wings of an angel
    March 22, 2006
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    Very nice write, I can relate to this poem as I am raising a child who is autistic, and you wouldn't believe how amazing they can be, yes they are in their own little world, but very amazing children and very lovable, I wrote a couple of poems on autism one stating on 'seeing through the eyes of the disabled" writing what other children put these kids through without seeing beyond their disability...and the other write is also entered into this contest titled "through my eyes", you had done a good write here, good luck in the contest
    Edited on Mar 22, 7:20 because ''.


  • honey bear
    March 22, 2006
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    a lovely write,pure and sweet.I think we have a winner here.good luck in the contest

  • sarajaneUK
    March 21, 2006
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    Thank you KiwiiwiK for reading and commenting, tis much appreciated.


  • Sonrio
    March 21, 2006
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    I needed the explaination, but once i read that it was very good. it is sad that some children are locked in their minds, but still love others...you did a wonderful job with this poem. I wish you good luck in my contest.


  • sarajaneUK
    March 12, 2006
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    ty for commenting, the inspiration, is partly taken from a friends child, who has something similar to autism, the child is very happy, in his own trapped world, and has no concept of what is happening outside it. For myself, i think this is the best poem, i have ever written, for all sorts of reasons. Am pleased you love it too. sj


  • fungshuay24
    March 12, 2006
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    I LOVE THIS..it's so emotional. what exactly was your inspiration for this poem?


  • sarajaneUK
    March 11, 2006
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    Ty SV for commenting, i do appreciate it....i just popped in a comment in the authors box, not sure if you have read it.... sj

  • SpiritVampyr
    March 11, 2006
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    This is great and was exactly what I was looking for in that option. I loved the way the flow only emphisied the poems message without completing obliterating it. Congratulations on a brillient poem and thanks for your second entry. Good Luck
    A Bientot
    SV

  • sarajaneUK
    February 26, 2006
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    hi Redneck, glad you loved the poem, ty for commenting, much appreciated sj


  • sarajaneUK
    February 26, 2006
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    hi grannyeri, this is about a child/parent-carer relationship really, the child is trapped within his own world, (eg as with autism). Thank you for commenting

  • sarajaneUK
    February 26, 2006
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    hi Timothy, thank you for commenting, much appreciated sj

  • sarajaneUK
    February 26, 2006
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    cuic, ty for commenting, i do appreciate it sj

  • RedNeck Poet gold member
    February 25, 2006
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    Excellent

    I loved it, such powerful writing and the emotion of love pours through your words


  • February 25, 2006
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    Good

    Very nice poem that you have written. Keep up the good work.


  • grannyeri gold member
    February 25, 2006
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    When I think of unconditional love I think of mother/child relationships so this was a bit different than I expected, but still very well written.


  • poeticweaver gold member
    February 25, 2006
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    Nice thoughts you jot, lovely indeed, nice imagery poetry, awe, love to read of love...Thanks for sharing you, and all the best to you in this contest!

    -Timothy The Poetic Weaver~

  • City wolf
    February 25, 2006
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    yes, yes, this is it. Good job

  • sarajaneUK
    February 24, 2006
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    hi meetmerman, ty for commenting, i do appreciate it, sj.


  • February 24, 2006
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    this one was quite heart to heart like ...


  • sarajaneUK
    February 20, 2006
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    hello and ty for commenting i do appreciate it. The child/person, is actually happy with his lot, but people perhaps dont quite understand this.


  • love my jose luis
    February 20, 2006
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    I like how this flows, I really do like how in a way it's dark, but in almost the same way it's happy.


  • sarajaneUK
    February 16, 2006
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    Hi Miss2u, thank you for commenting, i do appreciate it, and please, never feel foolish for questioning anything - i guess i should have put a note in the authors comments!

    This is written from a childs view, who is emotionally 'trapped' inside his own mind, like, for example with autism. He can see the rainbows, hear the music, smell the flowers and taste the bread, all in his pure child like manner, without any concerns of the world, outside his own.

    I hope this helps! Thank you once again for commenting, sj.

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    February 16, 2006
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    I enjoyed this,it is well presented and I understood everything except " my bread is pure" please enlighten me,I feel foolish not knowing but I am curious now,love and light,Yvette

  • wings of an angel
    February 16, 2006
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    what a beautiful poem, well done


  • Guineveres Analogy
    February 16, 2006
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    Wow! This is so romantic! I really liked the soft flow of the verses ..almost like its being said in a whisper..

    "My rainbows are not black
    My music cries no tears
    My flowers unblemished
    And my bread is pure".

    Lovely...really well written. Simple but yet intrinsic. Thanks for sharing!
    Jennifer


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    February 16, 2006
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    thisa is pretty good. the picture adds a softness to it that is so beautiful. good write. thank you for sharing it with me today. viyanna r langager


  • martinezjjoe
    February 16, 2006
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    excellent

    great work starts out strong and ends strong

  • shadow69
    February 16, 2006
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    My rainbows are not black
    My music cries no tears
    My flowers unblemished
    And my bread is pure

    those few words meant so much to me in this poem!!! they r very strong and powerful!!! i liked this poem alot! you gave really good talent in writing!!! never give up on you talent because only some one w/ your ability would be able to writin such a great peice of work!!! nice job!!!


  • She burns
    February 16, 2006
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    More than beautiful

    This is so beautiful and touching,The words are so creative,Very honest and true
    Love is the best thing ever
    Keep it up!


  • sarajaneUK
    February 15, 2006
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    hello!!! am pleased you like it....ive had a block for a month, hell i thought my writing days were over! ty for commenting


  • TheThinker
    February 15, 2006
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    Very well written

    Ohh wow... this is stunning.. I love it.. So enchanting..
    Well done xx


  • sarajaneUK
    February 15, 2006
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    hi cryincherub, i'm glad you liked this one, not all my stuff is deep, i do a reasonable shallow meaningless too! Ty for commenting, much appreciated.


  • Lac Face
    February 15, 2006
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    Not a problem, you deserve all the encouragement and words you have been recieving! much love & respect Face


  • sarajaneUK
    February 15, 2006
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    Hi Face, ty ty ty, i'm really pleased you like it. Thank you for commenting, i do appreciate it.

  • cryincherub
    February 15, 2006
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    Wow this is a deep poem..

  • Lac Face
    February 15, 2006
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    BEAUTIFUL!!!! I love the ending!! Good work! much love and respect Face

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