I look back on past times
alone in the dark
memories fade
but the pain still feels sharp
Sometimes I regret
to have known you at all
then sometimes I wait
and just wish that you'd call
I see pictures sometimes
that somebody else took
during times that I missed you.
I shouldn't have looked
And the knife that hurts most
is you don't seem to care
I don't know what I did;
you act like I'm not there
Maybe you won't forgive me
my nightmare stays true
but alone in the dark
I'll be waiting for you
Author notes
so tell me... does that ending sound really creepy? Or does it sound like the nromal kind of waiting?
Comment please.
Yes, you.
God, this situation is fucking ripping me apart. I don't want to go through this again
Written February 15th, 2006
What did you think
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you should post them anyways, complete or not complete
thanks for the comment, buddy -
in all honesty, i think the "i'll be waiting for you" not only fits well with the poem itself, but it is also a good ending for it. it seems to wrap up the poem with almost a final thought.
often i struggle to find a good way to close out poems i write (one reason why i don't have many up, they are all unfinished), but this one i felt had a very nice and very appropriate ending.
plus however your writing has you end the poem, creepy or not, is how you felt, so if it is in any way creepy, that's how it is.
take care
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thanks for the input!
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Well to me sounds a bit creepy the ending. But I see it in another way also. Like you'll be waiting for him reguardless of the time of day. I gave it a shot. Thanks for sharing. It was good. Take care now. xoxo. victoria
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