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Spirit In The Mist

  SPIRIT IN THE MIST


A young maidens spirit seen in the mist
Behind ivy covered walls hidden within
Centuries before she was banished
The life she dreamed had never been

As angels descended from heavenly skies
Shadows appeared in the dark of night
Hopelessness ensued waking moments
Final destination, the endless river her plight

A hush came over the courtyard so still
The young prince had been sent far away
As she reaches the murky river in tears
She falls to her knees and begins to pray

In her hand a nosegay from happier times
So withered still wrapped in ribbon of gold
Melting her heart with a night of passion
Her love was so handsome and so bold

Promises broken to this beautiful maiden
Opening her heart love was felt deep within
She believed love had finally found her
Now a heart lay broken as reality sets in

In the midnight darkness the moon is still
Laughter heard in a sweet angelic voice
Behind the ivy covered walls she dances
Death's arrival allows her now to rejoice

 




 

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Written February 14th, 2006

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  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    February 14, 2006
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    How very beautifully written this is, Sandy! This really touched my heart! An awesome write! Thank you so much for sharing!


  • Windworder gold member
    February 14, 2006
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    Now this was an interesting concept. She couldn't find love here but she finds it in the afterlife! I guess there is always hope for love. Great stuff.


  • Psychoktten
    February 14, 2006
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    This is a beautiful narrative. It tells the story in incredibly compelling language, with a great flow that hooked me from the beginning and didn't let me go. You've also managed to capture such a beautiful mood. The time and place come through so strongly, that I can see it in my minds eye. Excellent write!!

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    February 14, 2006
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    A very moving and most beautiful write Josephine.


  • February 14, 2006
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    nice poem.. oh and happy v day (thats today i think lol)


  • Bronwyn
    February 14, 2006
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    "In the midnight darkness the moon is still
    laughter heard in a sweet angelic voice
    behind the ivy covered walls she dances
    death's arrival allows her now to rejoice"

    i love it!!

    a lot of emotions. to me mostly sad, but non-the-less i like everything!

    i flows so well!
    *Happy V-day*


  • ennovy silver member
    February 14, 2006
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    excellent

    So full of emotions and they are deeply felt, my heart is touched, to be slapped back by the last lines:
    "behind the ivy covered walls she dances
    death's arrival allows her now to rejoice"
    You have embaced the soul of my imagination!.....Ennovy

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