Gold Dragon Necklace by wbiro at All poetry

            Gold dragon necklace slender figure
         sculpted curves rhythm drifting clouds of beauty
          sun moon and ice spiraling through frozen fields
             a heart dances gliding loving tearful bittersweet

        One thousand years bright chariots winged soaring
     lengthy winters fired hearts
    courage ascending above evanescence
    graced in artistry dreams of Desdemona
    charmed poised in elegance

    bells ringing crisp air Lyra Angelica
    pastoral fantasias hidden in loveliness
       feelings begin cold frosty breaths
          Concierto de Aranjuez weaving glassy loneliness...

         Giacomo Puccini, red violins crying
      in Lamento d’Ariane
   echoeing their songs:
   choreographed spheres solitude flying

    black swans reflecting ripples on frozen ponds
    glints an exquisite golden necklace
         magic leaping East of Eden.

“This is a sport, and it is beautiful!”
Sont des mots qui vont très bien ensemble, my Michelle...

“It has always been a dream to win the Olympics!”
My beauty, these are also words that go together well.

        Winning attitude pureness of heart gleaming gold
     Taj Mahals, Songs of India, Neverlands
       twirling looping seasons of romance
          Andrea Bocelli

             yes, the Romanza!

     "On your own" toes frozen glittering bruised freedom mastered
    curtains closing twilight gathers
   helix of memories unwillingly settles...

    ice flys anew
     tiny skates swarm
       twisting winding reaching for the heavens
              where you have dwelt
                 a place you have warmed!

Author notes

Michelle Kwan, figure skating champion for many of the past ten years. The Olympic gold has eluded her. She always wore a gold dragon necklace given to her by her grandmother for good luck. She has just bowed out of this year's winter Olympics in Turin, Italy.

The poem is based on her bio and on some of the musical scores and themes used in her skating programs.

"Sont des mots qui vont très bien ensemble"
translates to "My beauty, these are words that go together well."
The phrase is from the Beatle's song 'Michelle', after which Ms. Kwan's parents got the name Michelle!

and finally, bleh! I'm still not satisfied with this... (will I ever be?) I'll be tinkering with this forever, until it is perfect... or I wither away!
Written February 14th, 2006

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A contest entry

For The Pros! by Andy Stephenson. 300 points, ended February 20, 2006, 9 entries
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What did you think

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wbiro
February 18, 2006
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thanks, e, and good luck to you, too in this 'contest'!
ecrivain01
February 18, 2006
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I like it just the way it is. I don't think you should change another comma.

Very well done, and a wonderful tribute to a lovely woman.
wbiro
February 18, 2006
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yes, I've been constantly making changes, minor ones now, a comma here, a space there... I left a post on her fan page, let's see if she sees this and leaves a comment... (fat chance, but a chance nevertheless!)
Andy Stephenson
February 17, 2006
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I think you have taken on a difficult task. Satisfying yourself. It is definitely a good poem. This tribute is worthy I think. If you tinker more with it before judging, let me know and I will take another look. I think the lyric explanation was wise for those of us who know no French.
wbiro
February 16, 2006
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thanks, my brightest angel! Nice contemporary topic Ms. Kwan made, lot of heart there!
wbiro
February 16, 2006
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thanks a lot for the comment, Moonple, glad you liked my skating poem!
wbiro
February 16, 2006
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thanks, Prodigy, no, we can't all be into figure skating... but I thought is was a nice contemporary topic!
Disturbed Prodigy
February 16, 2006
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wow this was hot on ice, this was a great poem, me i am not that big on figure skating but i love how you told her actions, keep it flowing
SexyAngel0418
February 15, 2006
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WOW AP Daddy!! This is very beautifuL!! I really love watching Michelle Kwan skate!!! SHe is so graceful and this poem is graceful too!!! GOod luck in the contest!!!

Hugs,
Your Brightest Angel
Rubicar
February 15, 2006
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I just love reading it.. having its own style of expressing the thoughts of a good poet.
wbiro
February 15, 2006
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thank you greatly, Viyanna! She really had heart, and was an easy inspiration here, though my work here will get a bit more tinkering!
Viyanna Rosemarie
February 15, 2006
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"On your own" toes frozen glittering bruised freedom's master
curtains closing twilight gathers
helix of memories unwillingness settles...

this says so much more than it appears to say. the dedication is phenomonal in these skaters. i am sorry to know she bowed out of this year's olympics. she has worked so very hard. a very didicated, determined young lady who should see this beautiful poem you have written. viyanna
wbiro
February 15, 2006
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thank you for the comment from an 'average moody teenager', Music! I'll be working on this one a bit more, not quite 'there' yet with it! Glad you enjoyed it as is! Give my regards to Ontario!
wbiro
February 15, 2006
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Well, amazonia, I actually didn't know anything about her until recently, and while researching her, her heart shone through more than anything!
wbiro
February 15, 2006
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thank you very much, Debbie, glad you liked my piece here... I'm still banging my head on the 'beauty' aspect, however!
wbiro
February 15, 2006
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Poetryintheblood- thanks, poetess! That's what I am strving for, 'beauty, elegance'... about 101 more edits and I'll be there!
Edited on Feb 15, 7:02 p.m. because ''.
wbiro
February 15, 2006
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thanks, Kalani, glad you enjoyed my Gold Neckace piece! "Lamore di uni ultimi di poeta in un cuore per sempre." (a little Italian for you!) (about all I know! So if I have questions, I'll be coming to you!)
wbiro
February 15, 2006
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Well, purple, Kwan did a short program called 'Dream of Desdemona' where she 'played' Desdemona, the ill-fated wife of Othello, so you are correct in your Shakespear reference!
February Moon
February 15, 2006
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I liked this poem, and I so enjoyed what you wrote it about. This is a beautiful tribute. Great write.

Blessed Be, Chelsea
rainyday woman
February 15, 2006
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Moving
A moving piece It's a shame she didn't get to do the compition. I guess the Golden Dragon wasn't destened to be a good luck piece after all.I was on a brake at work when we heared that she had withdrawen and a couple of people actually cried.
Debbie Hansman
February 15, 2006
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WOW!....very beautiful.

Wonderful write!!!...loved it!!

debbie
Poetryintheblood
February 15, 2006
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Absolutely beautiful tribute, worded with such elegance Josephine.
KaLaNi
February 15, 2006
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OMG! Beautiful!! I absolutely love it!! Really great tribute to your favorite ice dancer!! I love the display of the page, but more importantly i love the poem. Great work.
purplelirpa
February 15, 2006
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"graced in artistry dreams of desdemona"--shakespeare's? That is the only famous one I'm aware of. In which case, I'm a little unsure as to how this part relates to the rest of it. I did think the piece was well-researched and very moving. It's sad that she withdrew at the last minute.
wbiro
February 14, 2006
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Thanks, Amy, glad you liked my little tribute here!
Your loving AP dad!
wbiro
February 14, 2006
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"Sont des mots qui vont très bien ensemble"
translates to "My beauty, these are words that go together well."
The phrase is from the Beatle's song 'Michelle', after which Ms. Kwan's parents named her!

I'll add this bit of info to my author's comments...! I'll probably tinker with this piece some more...
Andy Stephenson
February 14, 2006
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Technically this poem is probably very good, I think. I'd have been lost without the explanation in the author's comments. I recognize the Beatle lyrics, but I don't know what the French means. I've always wondered. If you would translate it, I would appreciate it. Thanks very much for entering.