Along the way our steps crossed,
seeking for a safe, solid ground
free of sudden and dreadful frost.
Watchful to strange sight and sound,
along the way our steps toppled
as a blast began to rebound.
Two travellers often ravelled
feel their hearts with true love be wound.
Along the way our steps equalled
enchanted with the gift we’ve found.
Along the way our steps singled
the misplaced stones we saw around.
Along the way, our steps handled
to us this love fair and profound.
Our lives became perfect aligned.
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I never saw that for of poetry before, so I'm dedicating it to Mayne 
Written February 14th, 2006
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Now that I've commented here you'll probably delete it. I hope you don;t. It is sad to delete the past. I know, I know...learn from me then! I always liked that photo of you. I still have it if you don't and want it. You were setting on a rail or something. Actually I always liked that one of me too. I actually look almost smart there.
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You have commented twice before and it is still here...you are weird.
You look good yes, I look as if I had a major stomachache
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Oh my, I love that background. First I almost look normal and second...well that photo of you is a turn on...well they all are aren't they?
I agree with macAndrew...it shows our progression...and I have a question...are we aligned yet or is that a future step?
Just don't make me your stepping stone!
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i ahven't sen this form either, there's laods i haven't lol a good poem i like the format, the repetition works great with the alliteration - waves at you there at the side
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I had to come back and re-read this. Loved how the refrains "matured" as the relationship developed.
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lovely poem Mariza, reminded me of watching children taking there first baby steps, which funny enough I was in the post office the other day and this little girl had squeeky toy in her shoes so every step made a squeek she was precious as are you
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I was just about to ask you what the heck a "Maymie form" was!
It looks a little like terza rima except the rhyming scheme alters itself after the first stanza (ack!) which threw me for a loop immediately. lol But the poem itself is gorgeous, and conveys emotions I only wish I could experience at the moment. What a wonderful thing to dedicate to someone, a poem and a format! I hope he enjoyed it. I did. 
Not to mention, the words ravel themselves together beautifully.
Hope all is well in your part of the universe!
Many blessings,
Raven Aurora
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Bravo!
Nicely done! Wonderful! Yes, I, too, have never seen this form of poetry! Bravo! -
Good job. I really liked this. A very unique form indeed. Good write.
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Thaanks Susan This is an easy form, started writing it a week ago, but waited for the right day to give it as Valentine present to Mayne
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excellent~
Excellent and a lovely poem you have penned here sis.....as well as romantic...You and Yem look so perfect for one another and I am so happy for the both of you..I have never heard of this form before..but it was certainly enjoyable and worth the read
Love n hugs
Susan~~~
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This is such a lovely poem, Mom! I am so glad that you and Yem have found each other! You are an example to me of what true love can be like.
Love,
Elisa
P.S.-You are so beautiful! And Yem is a very handsome young man, is he not? I have never seen a picture of him before.
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This is a wonderful love poem and the form is appealing and unique. I am happy for anyone who has found a deep love such as this. Beauitfully written.
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Your repetitions are intriguing, Mari, this could be a fun form to write. I see you interpreting the last year in metaphor, as only you could see it.
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My own form! Wow, love does strange things to people! Look at me in that photo, don't I look philosophical! No one would know I was kneeling in front of a wood pile, lol.
Thank you Amanda, I loved the poem, and the form and it's not the best form you have given me , but it is a wonderful gift!
Heck it's Valentine's Day, I get to be a little suggestive on this day!
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Mi querida hija,
This is an interesting form with the end word of each refrain altered and the refrain itself moving down a line with each stanza and then returning to the top. It's all getting so complicated for me to follow.
I like the name Maymie for it (or maybe you could call it a Mayonnaise?)
Anyway, it seems rather romantic. Has it got something to do with V-day? Everything else around here seems to - even signs on monkey's tails!
I hope y'all have a happy V-day.
Love and hugs, XXX El Padre.
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This form reminds me about chards of several one all mingled through each other you see, this is romantic, instead of that forced piece of junk I posted
You could so see and feel that you have written this with all of your emotions, while i squished too much brain within my lines
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