In my heart
resides a love
it has been
a wanderer
If it roams
come take this love
stay my lonely wandering
Author notes
This is of the form 'Whitney'
WHITNEY:
This titled syllabic form, created by Betty Ann Whitney, has exactly seven lines:
Syllable Pattern: 3, 4, 3, 4, 3, 4, 7
Now, how can such a little poem cause me so many problems! I've rewritten it and agonized over it many times already!
In my heart
resides a love
I can feel
it wander here.
If I roam
please take this love
then with me go wandering.
In my heart
resides a love
it has been
a wanderer.
If it roams
please hold me tight
don't let it go wandering.
In my heart
resides a love
I have seen
it wanders here.
If I go
please take this love
and let it roam, wandering.
In my heart
resides a love
it has been
a wanderer
If it roams
return my love
stay this lonely wandering.
In my heart
resides a love
it has been
a wanderer
If it roams
come steal this love
stay my lonely wandering.
and thanks to my poetry daughter lavender shadows for helping me and pointing me to the contest!
Written February 13th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Poetic Form Alphabet Game by Nicole Hanna.
1000 points, ended February 14, 2006, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I promised myself I'd go back and comment a little more thoroughly on the entries in my contest, and find myself really enjoying this form. You've inspired me to try it out for myself. These short forms are extremely appealing because it takes a certain mastery of poetry to say what you want in so few words, and have reach the audience in some tangible sort of way, which this piece does quite well. It has a rather haiku feel to it, but manages to express a keen sense of emotion at the same time. Thank you for entering my contest (though I'm late getting this to you
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thanks for the comment, Goth chick, and welcome to AP!
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Great write, It sure does say alot in few words, those are the best kind of poems. Excellent write
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I like this very much, it says so much in so little space. It also flows very well, you have it very nicely written, I hope to read more of your writing.
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