A small, innocent candle
is faced with the world,
wind,
rain,
darkness…
Be safe, calls a loved one,
be safe,
is there anyone to hold me in their hand?
Be safe?
Small and innocent, take me,
shelter me from the wind,
cover me from the rain,
I’ll be safe.
I will shine,
hold me by the window,
I will shine,
I watch the darkness,
Watch tears with shadows fall,
fear not.
For as long as I’m safe,
inside the window,
the darkness will drive me to burn brighter.
I will shine,
a guiding light,
be a loved one, lead others,
be safe, I call,
Be safe.
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Written February 13th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- CANDLEMAS by Vera Rich.
300 points, ended February 10, 2007, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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The last few weeks have been really fraught - a huge concatenation of smallish but VERY time consuming problems - including a breakdown of contact with my ISP, which left me cut off from the web for three days.
I am still trying to clear up the points from the Candlemas competition: You receive 75 points for 2nd place, plus 20 points for following the rules of format (which many entrants did not) plus 10 points for entering a prewritten poem... total 105 points...
I really do intend to critique all entries in due course... but when "due course" will be I do not know... Anyway, at least you have your points... or will do so in a few minutes. -
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Thanks for the update and all the work you're putting into this.
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Acknowledgment - and reminder on bonus points
Thank you for entering. I regret the delay in starting to process the entries; however, when I was about to open them on Candlemas morning, I discovered that the "system" had listed the competition as closing on 6 February - 4 days later. So, in case anyone was working to this later deadline, I let the competition run on. Naturally, I did not look at the page again until this morning (6 February) - and then I found the closing date had reverted to 2 February as I had originally intended it to be. (I do NOT understand how this happened - however, the finer points of the internet remain a mystery to me).
I am now acknowledging entries, and - in view of the delay, will download them for judging so that I shall not have to look at your page again before I have reached my decision. (Do not worry - I shall delete them as soon as I have finished the judging)
So,this means that the period for critiquing other entries can begin as from now, and run until Friday (9 February) mid-day London time.
If you wish to earn bonus points for critiquing, please critique at least three entries by other people. Critiques should be written in good English, avoiding text-speak, should be at least 50 words long, and be MEANINGFUL.
Please note that critiques dated before the competition closed will not, repeat NOT, count towards bonus points.
Also that to be eligible for bonus points you MUST leave your poem in the competition until the FINAL report on it is sent to you as an IM. Withdrawing it prematurely could mean that other competitors who have critiqued it could lose THEIR chances of a bonus.
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a good poem though this line made me pause
Watch tears with shadows fall,
shadow's fall? just that one line really - the rest of the poem flows smoothly i think spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
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Thanks for your comment - I'll think about that line.
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This is cute. I love it! I wish I had a candle that would shine brightly! Another awesome poem! Keep writing! Oh and HAPPY VALENTINES DAY! Remember that I love you! xOx_Georgia.
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