Digging for something that maybe isn't there
something that lifts the wound to the light
Pulls me out from inside
Caught up assembling the contrasts which pull me under
But sometimes something grounds me
And I love everyone I see
Sooner or later the darkness settles restlessly inside
And I feel murder in me
Its terror that lives at the bottom of something insane
What I've discovered has never known love
And wont take the Novocain
You wonder where such a creature could evolve
I don't think anything this lifetime has created such a wound
Such a puzzle to solve
I've always had more baggage than possessions
Either I'm insane
Or I've learned touchier in every lifetime
Always catching the same reflection that shows me
the core of me is a crime
Funneling what flows naturally into a more positive filter
So I only secrete calm and happy things
that don't break the furnisher
But it is to the depths of this creature that I surrender
Until we become one
And with us maybe
All the worlds lost children
Author notes
Comments please
Written February 12th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
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Ditto
It is enjoyable to see myself in the work on the second read. The first impression though, is a feeling of being without mentor. How can anyone survive without predecessors in this backwards realm? This guilt of power
confines those blessed with conscience. Has your side unseen been your mentor? Is it better to loved and lost or never etc...
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omg.
This is awesome man. Sometimes I feel like that... When I was a real little kid my brother talked me into thinking I was the anti-christ and I used to cry all night. hahah.... anyways... I really liked the part where you said,
"What I've discovered has never known love
And wont take the Novocain
You wonder where such a creature could evolve"
that's awesome. To tell you the truth the poem was just great. well, good luck in the contest man.
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INCREDIBLE!!!!
...whoa....(head spins). BRILLIANT. hmmmm...great, unforced flow and unique prose without verbosity. wit and depth together, hiding with just the proper thickness of veil, that which can be seen by those who have eyes to see.
this was a wonderful, wonderful work of art and one of the best i've ever read in here.
thank you for this!!!
atb....................................................Lionslove
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Thank you very much for your comments. They mean a lot coming from a talented writer such as yourself! Again, thank you.
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Hmmm ... this poem makes me really truly think ... and I love it because I can definitely relate. Sometimes I scare myself with the strength of emotions I find hiding deep inside, and you have captured so eloquently the monster within. "And I feel murder in me ... the core of me is a crime". Yes - you have given us a terrible, frightening beauty with your words, and I love it .
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umm whats this about im confused maybe that means it's deep or it's confusing i loved the word choice and the flow got stuck on the meaning and which option u may have chosen otherwise that an all in all great poem
Chris
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