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November's Storm

One bottle
And the strobe lights flicker
Two
And they beat slower
Three
And they fade away
Four
Seconds to put in the keys
Five
Straight Jackets
Four
Raindrops continute to fall from the November storm
Three
Bumps, Crash. A sudden stop. Stumble.
Two
Tears. A broken arm. A shattered wrist. "internal bleeding"
One
Tear, where does the sky's end and mine begin?

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Written February 12th, 2006

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  • Blooming Poet
    January 21, 2008
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    Great poem. The repetion of numbers really add to the poems feel. Great write.


  • Lady Voldemort silver member
    February 21, 2006
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    hey

    damn I love the "one two three four five four three two one" thing...that was fuckin awesome.

    Simple imagery, straight and to the point. you get your message across clearly and effectively without rambling. awesome job.

    keep writing.

    MORSMORDRE!
    - The Dark Lady


  • February 13, 2006
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    wow...nice visual...like it.

    x0x