"She weepeth sore in the night, and her tears are on her cheeks: among all her lovers she hath none to comfort her, they are becoming her enemies" Lamentations 1:2
Angry storm breaks forth;
silencing the screams.
Terror struck the castle walls.
Shivering in the corner
praying for her loved ones.
God hears,
but does not shelter her with
arms made of the earth.
She shakes in turmoil
wanting,
waiting.
But all they see,
is her being of the castle.
Her act of seduction
had brought this upon her.
What a treacherous thing,
she hath done.
Lover upon lover
walking past her.
God hears,
but does not shelter her with
arms made of the earth.
A tremor slices her spine
as she looketh up in the skies.
"God,
I Ask thee to forgive me.
My acts were not of
your askings of us.
Yet, I ask of forgiveness.
You are my Savior."
Is all He wants to hear
from her bloodied lips.
Author notes
After I wrote this..my heart started to race awfully fast. I've never written a poem based on a verse in the bible, and it really...brought a reaction to me.
Written February 11th, 2006
A contest entry
- 16 Option Spiritual Contest by Sharcu.
300 points, ended February 15, 2006, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Sorry it took me so long to get around to commenting on your poem, Kasey
It's taken me a while to comment on everyone's poem 
Hopefully I'll have it judged by tomorrow... but it's going to be really tough. 
Great description... I'm amazed at how you could take that one verse and come out with this. I hope you plan on writing more "scripture inspired poetry" 
Good luck in the contest!
--Tim -
I don't know what much to say because I haven't I completely read the bible before, so I wouldn't know how this reflects to the story. But still, it's an excellent poem. The imagery in this poem is awesome. From a previous comment, I can tell this poem goes great with the verse from the bible. Great write!
Loves,
~Ricky -
oo la la, I liked this poem. It's so dark and intense. I've never read that verse in the bible...probably no surprise, as I've read very little of the bible. Oh well. Anyway good luck in the contest!
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Intense to say the least, with an almost cliffhanger ending. I second what sandy said for I couldn't have put it any better. Best of luck to ya.
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awesome write. Very powerful. A truly beautiful poem. Thank you so much for sharing. A beautiful and heartfelt poem. Thank you for entering. Best of luck in the contest. God Bless you, Sandy
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