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Mirrored Uncertainty

I seek within the clouded mirror,
a vision of my future course.
Needing some assurance clear,
illusions have no solid voice.

Within the silver fractures shown,
a murky vision spreads its addle.
No delusional truth is ever known,
with my future I must battle.

The mirror's many dimensions deep,
cannot produce a haven from fate.
I find my soul must wager a leap,
into vague murky pools of blind faith.

Will my path become rose petals sweet?
Or sharp slash of thorns I must take?

             ~~~Suseann~~~








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Written February 11th, 2006

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  • Autumn Whisper
    May 21, 2006
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    Lovely poem suseann, kind of, what should I do? sort of poem, I like it, well done, keep up the excellent work
    best wishes as always
    xElectricEyezx


  • just rob gold member
    March 6, 2006
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    This is well written and evocative. The introspection is shared by most creative types. I really enjoy the way you manipulate the rhyme also. Well done!
    Peace, Rob


  • Puppydog gold member
    February 13, 2006
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    THIS IS TRULY WONDERFUL!

    Ah, if only we knew what is in the future for us. This is yet another very beautiful poem my dear friend.


  • suseann
    February 13, 2006
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    YOU MUST OF PICKED UP ON MY SELF DOUBTS IN HERE.Ha! I have um too.THANK YOU.

  • ecrivain01
    February 13, 2006
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    Not bad. It reminds me of somebody writing an "answer" to "The Man In The Glass". I hope your future works out well and that things become much better soon.


  • Watuwant silver member
    February 11, 2006
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    I wouldn't call this grim, but rather introspective. We all try to view our future internally, wondering what shall be. Faith assures us that what will be, will be, and even then we'll be too. To be or not to be is somewhat of an oxymoron.
    Interesting poem, and one that shows your provocative nature.
    peace
    doug


  • Kukana gold member
    February 11, 2006
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    This is a grim look into reality, as our lives have different depths this is a wonderfully written peice to look into those depths, great job!

    S~


  • Night Hope gold member
    February 11, 2006
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    "I seek within the clouded mirror,
    a vision of my future course.
    Needing some assurance clear,
    illusions have no solid voice."

    Very cool penning, suse...beautiful rhyme/off~rhyme...well done, my Friend...Good luck in the contest...I leave you with one of my favorite sayings... Prairie Princess

    'We can complain that a rose bush has thorns or be grateful that a thorn bush has roses.' ~ author unknown


  • Lionheart
    February 11, 2006
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    Loved it!

    See? I knew you could do it. Beautiful! Just beautiful!

  • plath-girl27
    February 11, 2006
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    great poem

    This poem is very visual and beautiful.

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