This, my breath before last
I'll tell you I love you
But sorry, we can't make this through
This, my last breath
I'll tell you true love never dies
But nights alone are the final cries
This, my death
I'll tell you not to cry
I never really had to die
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Written February 11th, 2006
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Was it their fault that this person had to die? With the last breath you tell of your undying love? I think this poem could be expanded. I like it, but I would like to see more.
I am glad you like "Simple and Complex". I hope you have fun with your contest.
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Wow. Very expressive. I like that it is short because that makes it so much more...what's the word I'm looking for? Impactful (is that a word?). In any case, I think it is very beautiful. I think it flows well. It shows emotion too, which I always enjoy in a piece of writing. I like this poem. I like it a lot. Peace and love.
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WOW!!!!.. This poem is amazing, it was just filled with emotion.. What an amazing poem, I'm sure many people can relate to this and I'm sure many people would like it.. What a fantastic job.. Keep up the good work
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i LOVED this poem! even though it was short,It was one of the best poems that i read.It was like... you poured out your soul for us fellow poetry writers to read. I know its hard to go through all this stuff in life... but us poem writers get through it by writing.
keep up the good work! 
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