Slowly I’m running out of time
Time to accomplish what I need to
Trying to catch up with the seconds
But the faster I run, the more time I lose
Here I am, alone in my own world once again
Locked in my own private time capsule called life
I just want to escape from the repetitious cycle
But the days are going by like a strand in the wind
My life is a ship that I am the captain of
Some days the ocean is smooth, silky
While others it is in disorder, crashing waves
Trying to keep the wheel steady; secure
I hear the white winged dove singing a song
Yet I can’t manage to make out the words
The beauty of the melody is hidden from me
I just want to hear the true sound they are making
Caught up in the complexity of this world; humanity
Sometimes I just want to escape from it, leave it all behind
Yet I know I can’t do that; I must continue to dwell here
This is my home; these are my friends. This is where I belong
Author notes
I feel this is one of the best poems I have ever written... but probably no one else will think that. 
That's how it always works out. Anyways, I wrote this for an assignment here on AP (in the class Poetic Basics). Partially inspired by the lyrics to "Edge Of Seventeen" by Stevie Nicks (even though I've never heard the song before 
). I tried to be creative and use a lot of metaphors... which is what poetry should be about. A lot of my poems are very blunt and simple. This one I tried to be different. Hopefully it worked 
Written February 10th, 2006
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I feel I have read this before but in I must have not commented. *shakes head* Anyways, this is the title I am going to choose for your contest, hence why I'm reading it, so I thought I would check it out. Yes, I would agree, it is one of your best writes. But again, I say that with an admiration to all your poems so you know.
I really enjoyed this, esp. the metaphor on you being a captain of the ship of life.. what a great concept and idea! Very good creativity! 
Just beautiful, I can't think of any other way to put it. No suggestions as this was just so perfect, if you messed with it, you'd ruin it. heh, like you. ;D 
*God Bless*
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Excellent
This is definitely so skillful and inspiring. Adding the water background only makes it more penetrating to one's eyes and sense. It has the power to seep so deep into the mind and grab in all the right places.
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by stevie nicks????? OMG!!!!!! woman get a grip!! lol...sory just had to b shocked at that... OMFG!!!!!! wow, i feel special./... i hav permitted to inspire that from the likes of u... lol...okay, actually it was stevie...but w/e...i shall remain in my belief that i inspired something... o yay! i was gonna ask wat u needed the lyrics for... ooo u hav to hear that song! if u get on msn today ill send it to yas...
yes i do agree this is one of ur finer writes... hmm...the metaphors u used in this were perfect...
keep it up mate!
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This is wonderful..makes me think about life, how people see it etc. etc. Great job Tim..ahh it was very deep, and it is one of your best works. Amazing. I had toread it out loud.
Here are some critiques though:
In the fourth line, first stanza you wrote 'loose'instead of 'lose'. (I know it looks wrong, but the correctly spelling would be with one o instead of two.)
In the first line, last stanza you wrote 'complicity' instead of 'complexity'. Unless of course you meant to write the advancment of crimes..but I don't think that fits.
Other than that..it's great. Great job Tim, great
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wow keep up the good work
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WONDERFUL POEM
I have to agree with you. This was an amazing poem. The imagery was awesome and it was so heartfelt. That is why it is so wonderful, it is full of your emotion. I can so relate to the feeling your words convey. Thank you for sharing. Hope you have a God filled weekend and He blesses you mightily. Love, Mom
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