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oh how i wonder

Why is it so hard?
to make everything go away,
To just leave me be,
i don't trust anyone anymore,
i just want to leave,
to disappear for awhile,
headaches come easily,
The pain shoots threw me like bullets,
and it never lets up,
I don't want this to go on,
but i cant stop it,
It wraps around me like a snake,
Forcing out my air,
until i can no longer breathe,
Its grip is very tight,
It crushes and grinds my bones,
oh how i wonder,
will this pain and torture ever stop,
oh how i wonder.

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Written February 10th, 2006

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  • Flames of Fire
    February 10, 2006
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    aww baby, I'll ease your pain. Just remeber pain is somthing we all have some have more but soon or later you will have someone to make all the pain ease away and make you forget all your troubles. I love you
    TJ

  • Eusebius
    February 10, 2006
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    Bravo!

    A nicely crafted dark piece of poetry, not overdone at all, quite good! (Suggestion: the poem might be improved if you were to even up the syllable count in each line, most of you lines have 5 syllables. if you were to change it so that all of them had 5 syllables it would give an even much better flow to the poem. Only a suggestion.) Bravo! Bravo!