Mother oh! she is the
Synonym for affection.
Mother Oh! she's the
Beginning of one's knowledge.
Mother oh! she's a synonym
For matchless advices!
Deep in one's mothers heart
One can really see
The true inner beauty!
She stands for wisdom
She stands for endurance
She is the ultimate synonym
For all those qualities
That adore her inner beauty.
Author notes
My mother and mother nature is the inspiration behind this poem.I am not a professional writer.My poem may not have the perfect finishing.So kindly give your suggestion for improvement
Written February 10th, 2005
A contest entry
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300 points, ended October 30, 2006, 59 entries
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I'm so glad you asked for suggestions and it seems like not one viewer has left you any. As far as mother nature goes - that's another story and now I understand why this isn't in a personal tone. I think it would have been much more impactful had you described why your mother or a mother inspired this. Or how mothers and mother nature is similar and made the obvious comparisons of the two. You have a good thing here - a good idea. If you decided to edit it or make some drastic changes, let me know and if I haven't finished judging yet - I'll take the edited version. Thank you for entering.
There are so few professional writers on this site - you have nothing to worry about. Keep reading and writing to hone the craft.
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