Whenever I lay eyes on you, my heart begins to race,
and just hearing your name can bring a smile to my face.
What I feel is unlike anything I’ve felt before,
even if you barely touch me, you leave me craving more.
When we’re parted for a time, it drives me near insane,
the verses that I write for you would put Shakespeare to shame.
Love and lust and all the rest are flooding through my soul,
Happily Ever After with you is my eternal goal.
When I close my eyes, I can picture us together -
getting married, having babies; young and fun forever.
We’d have a big white wedding, and a honeymoon by the sea,
we would never fall out of love, for we were meant to be.
There is just one tiny little problem that could keep
the two of us from living the perfection that I seek -
my boyfriend standing over there, so faithful and so true…
he may be many amazing things, but he simply isn’t you.
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Username: D r a m a Q u e e n 4 6 9
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A contest entry
- I shouldn't love you; But I want to. by splinteroflight..
550 points, ended November 14, 2008, 20 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love Triangle by mackereth.
600 points, ended August 3, 40 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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So I would like to congratulate you on being the first of 4 poets to actually read and follow my rules. I was beginning to think I would have to close the contest. Thank you. Well onto your poem. I really liked how you made this poem flow. How it seemed like the narrator was simply describing the best person in the world, and then how they went to a darker, more regretful tone in the final paragraph. Wonderful write.
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wow this is simply brilliant, i can relate to it .....say no more lo
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Aww this was so beautiful & sweet.
Filled with true love & emotion.
Great flow and rhyme scheme too.
Best of luck & thanks for entering
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"Houston we have a problem" (look it up)! No matter what happens in our crazy lives there's always somethin' to get over and it never stops. -c
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I loved it! I can absolutely relate to it and thats what makes me sad, its a horrible place to be in. Thanks DQ, its a wonderful write!!
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beutiful absolutely beautiful. Damn, how could I compete with THIS?
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Fxcking wow.
Is all I can say. There really is NO words to describe my response to this piece!
This, this is what I'm looking for.
So raw, the emotion - it's intense!
I absolutely adore this!
Well done on a quite frankly AMAZING write!
Good luck!
<3<3<3
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Very well done, an excellent flow and the imager is wonderfully done as well. I like where it takes the mind. bravo
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MAGNIFICENT! AWSOME! I LOVED IT. YOU ARE A GOOD WRITER. I LOVE THE RHYME SCHEME AND FLOW. AND I LOVE THE TWIST AT THE END IT WAS GOOD. KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK
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A wonderfully beautiful piece of poetry, my friend! And to answer your question at the end, yes, I HAVE been with someone and thought of someone else at the same time
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lol, very cool twist at the end, i love it
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nice twist at the end of this poem....as others have said, it's an age old problem that plagues us all. Good job.
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Very well presented this is an age oled problem we all have faced in our lives only thing I could tell ya is maybe the boyfriend aint the right one for you, if he were then the other guy would not matter good luck and thanks for poeting this one
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conflicted a bit? LOL... this evokes many feelings... loved the last line also... there always seems to be small problems eh?..peace..shzoosy
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wow that was deep. very nice write. loving the wrong person. heart not in the right place. sad but true, many people feel this way. very good poem.
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WONDEFULLY AMZAING! i love it! great job!!! good luck in my contest!!
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this was very well written. Heh I know the feeling of being with someone else and not being able to get with them, however, there were a bit more reasons to the reason my mind was swaying. Anyways, you did great in capturing the emotions, good luck in the contest!
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awww i love this that happend 2 me once i was like
but you just got 2 get on with it and see what happens good luck in my contest well dont love sara 
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the only person i've ever really loved is Chris!!!! hehe!!! so yeah i can't really relate to this but it was an awesome write hun! loved it!
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Oh wow!!! I sooo love this!!! I know this feeling. I wrote a similar piece. It really sucks to feel like this! As always an amazing write!!
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Awww poor Drama--*Gives you a hug* A nice peice, I think my favorite part was "He may be many amazing things, But he simply isn't you" it must be tough to love someone while you're with another. Perhaps there is a decision to be made here.
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Wow, this is intense! I really enjoyed it! Great write, and thanks for sharing!
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