My heart beats hard.
My blood races 'round.
A tall slip of a girl
I have found.
First sight love.
She moves me so.
I am warm
and all aglow.
Oh, the beauty,
the slender elegance.
Just a slip of a girl
in my presence.
--Ellis
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Written February 10th, 2006
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The old poets talk about this -- Leigh Hunt and Yeats. And they didn't even have Tiki to help them.
A nice write.
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sweet
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Outstanding
This poem catches all the exuberance of love at first sight. Your rhyme is always so fluid you have a real gift.
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Very nice job hiding the rhyme.
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This was written with true warmth and was amazing.
You can feel the love and the depth of it. I love
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Nice It's short and to the point
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I love that this envelopes the thoughts and feelings of just a moment, or matter of few moments...
It brings us into one, and how he was feeling...
Beautiful.
♥
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Ah! I love this!
and what a wonderful border, too! Your poetry just slips off the tongue in such a delicious way! Well done, Friend, this was a joy to read.
Love
Myra
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This is pure and simple and elegant, with a lovely flow that was really delightful. Keep up the wonderful works.
David
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Wow, I am so happy for you that you've found her... This is exactly what happens when you meet somebody and there is love at first sight. Well done.
Anna.
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It sounds like love, Ellis, or at least beautiful infatuation It's a very positive poem, nicely written
And wow... this is the last poem you've posted??!!... nearly two years ago? No wonder I haven't seen you lately. I hope you've been okay.
Merry Christmas
Dee
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the beauty and the abounding smiles are overwhelming...
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I am loving this piece,
your ending is what got to me the most.
" Oh, the beauty,
the slender elegance.
Just a slip of a girl
in my presence ".
I really enjoyed this piece a lot.
Very, very nicely done.
Loveandblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
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Amazing!
I love the simplicity of this poem, it was well written and the story it told really stood out. It made me remember back to the first day I saw my boyfriend. That happiness you feel inside.
I love this poem, Thank you for writing it.
Jasmine
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here he goes, the rhyme-king has conquered the kingdom of freeverse !!! and I must say, that it suits you very well ...
maa
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Oh my, what a find
your words sweet and kind
and as i read they seemed to get hotter
Please take no offence
I dont mean to be dense
but she's young enough to be your own daughter
galfalfa
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Very Perceptive
I have this time machine, you see
Took me back to when I'm three
Mom I thought
That I sought
She fit just fine; just right for me
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Grinning and admiring and appreciating!
You sly fox, you. At first I thought Tiki might be talking, but no, it is Ellis! Fine writing, most truly. 
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Lovely expression of love here - and you did a free verse poem (I thought I was going to find a rhyming one)!! I liked the "glow" of this poem... it shines through the words.
~ Nicolette
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that poem is very beautiful. very direct too...its great how you could get this all down in such a short poem...one thing ive never been very good at.
...great write...
...keep it up...
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Expressive
This is sweet and direct. That "aha" moment when you catch your first glimpse of someone you feel you would gladly spend your whole life with. Thank you for the nostalgic (for me
read.
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WONDERFUL POEM
This was beautiful John. You are a romantic at heart. Thank you for sharing this delightful poem. Take care, Sandy
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