So pretty, yet cold
She lies, pale and bleeding now
Dagger through her heart.
Bearing the sign of
A cry for help gone awry
Death by suicide.
Lying, dead as night
A tragic waste of a life
Only seventeen.
Author notes
*This was written for my grade 12 Writer's Craft class two years ago and, thankfully, it is not personal the way that some of the others are.
Written December 6th, 2004
Artist credit: "Strange Tears" by jensmander at deviant art.
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So pretty, yet so cold
She lies, pale and bleeding now
Dagger through her heart.
Bearing the sign of
A cry for help gone awry
Death by suicide.
Lying, dead as night
A tragic waste of a life
Only seventeen.
Thank you for entering my ku contest. This is a very well written haiku chain, but I think I may have found a syllable count problem. "So pretty, yet so cold" contains six syllables and it should only be five. -
This is so simple yet so good! I loved it Thank you so much for your entry and good luck!
Leslie -
I like it. Haiku is a good form. I also like how you used three haiku to tell a single story, yet they stand seperately. Good writes. good luck.
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Wow. I like how simple but powerful this poem is.
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oh wow, that is so sad. Tragic. It is a very nice write, very moving. Keep it up!!
~Katie N.~
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