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The Soul is unconquerable

A Body
Bendable

It is just bone and muscle
Defiant in the wind
But under the force of strength
It breaks

A Mind
Defeatable

It is intelligent,
Calculating
And wise
But under the pressure of anger
It is just flesh,
It dies

A Soul
Unconquerable

Is Eternal,
Ever guiding,
Ever knowing,

The Soul is Invincible.

It is the force through which
All life is decided

It is the eternal being
That learns from all life

It shall never break,
Nor bend
Nor die

For the soul is unconquerable.

Author notes

Inspired by Plato, and my favourite poem the Invictus. The name Invictus is Latin for Unconquerable.
This is my homage to Invictus.
Written February 9th, 2006

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  • princess of sporks
    March 9, 2006
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    kudos dude...

    So true, man. So true. Ya' gotta really catchy title there. And it's followed by a very true poem. (I point out the obvious alot...) Yeah, I likes it. Kudos.


  • catz Moderators member
    February 20, 2006
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    A deeply felt and accurate poem, I'd say, chris. There's much wisdom in these lines and I can see the Plato influence in it.
    This is very good, I enjoyed the read very much

    Pozo told me about you and I received your IM Welcome to the family, son


    Dee
    Your AP Mum


  • ImOnly-Me
    February 10, 2006
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    wow thats cool, thanx for entereing and good luck!


  • February 9, 2006
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    Beautifully expressed

    Greta poem, beautiful imagery and description of such a powerful feeling. I believe you are trying to portray hope and how it never dies, but I could be wrong... I enjoyed this poem a lot and I hope to read more of your work soon. Good job and keep writing!!

    Lady Serenity


  • Nocturne
    February 9, 2006
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    Wonderfully defiant and a really strong message. It is so true. Every single thing in our world can fail us, but what matters most of all that we do not fail ourselves and that our soul continues standinng up strong against the forses arrayed against it. A great write.


  • February 9, 2006
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    i thought this was briliant i loved it, it just seems so amazing and deep
    keep up the good work bbz


  • SPAMkid
    February 9, 2006
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    4.5 indestructable objects out of 5

    I liked this, a different kind of layout then your average poem, and it works well.


  • xDemonicxAngelx
    February 9, 2006
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    Oh wow!!.. I really love this.. Its so true.. I loved reading this it was such a great write.. I love your poems.. Keep up the good work


  • twilight seduction
    February 9, 2006
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    Oh, how true! The mind and body are earthly things, subject to earthly weaknesses and faults. But the soul is bade purely by the individual, and cannot bend nor break, nor truly dies. Huh. Very spiritual poem, yet without the religion. Very nice.


  • Darkness Falls
    February 9, 2006
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    So true. If I had read this when I was having problems, it'd bring me to tears. Now, my eyes are just watering severely, but it's still a great job. keep up the good work!

  • pozo
    February 9, 2006
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    Quite dark at the beginning, with a lot of hope at the end I liked the fact that you were inspired by Plato and of course Invictus (starting to think that Henley's poem is your muse .) Pen on poet, I like the depth you have my friend
    All the best
    Pozo

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