Broken man with sunken eyes
He's heard the drums and battle cries
An endless war or so it seems
This fight to keep alive his dreams
But years have taken quite a toll
His demons in complete control
A life of vain and fruitless toils
Now to the victor go the spoils
It's hard to swallow, this defeat
A loss so total and complete
He's beaten 'til no hope remains
A wounded soldier vents his pains
In screams of anguish, loud and wild
And waves of tears as if a child
Who's lost and far away from home
Alone and left to ever roam
His enemies, with flags unfurled
Will burn and rape his perfect world
While shackled, he must watch it all
The city sacked, the walls will fall
His treasured plans are whisked away
His foes now shake the head and say
"Let's kill this fool who dared to trust"
Then pierce his heart with dagger's thrust
Author notes
option 2
A contest entry
- 114th Contest by Tarja.
450 points, ended December 20, 2007, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ~*!!SO MANY OPTIONS!!*~ by cbsbecm88.
450 points, ended October 15, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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great!
this is a wonderful poem! it's so strong and lively and so unique! and i loved that it rhymed and the flow was very nice!
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Very hard edged and dramatic piece here. Good job with the prompt and Conrats. on the Bronze!
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Wow... that was pretty damn drmaatic! It was so intense and romantically written out. Fabulous job bringing this to life. Everything was so delicious! Thanks or entering and good luck.
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A very strong write, well worded, great meter and rhyme... and all around terrific poem. Great job.
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a mental and material destruction of war or any battle ..even the conflict in the mind or a personal tragedy of a failure in life...powerfully expressed here..
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Oh my Raker. This is heartwrenching. I can't believe I didn't see this one in my favorites. Are you ok? Hope this is just a write and you are off somewhere smoking a soggy cigar...I know mine is frayed and mushy by this time. Anyway, I sure hope you're ok my friend.
~Lyrical
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Such a wonderful flow of words here, excellent rhyme and a wonderful story. all in all a real pleasure to read Thank you
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