I Remembered You Today
I remembered you today.
Intense blue tinted gaze,
Piercing to the core of me.
All our world around us,
Fell apart and died.
Still your sweet smile.
I remembered you today.
You reached out your hand,
It lightly touched my heart.
As your fingers brushed my skin.
You smiled, softly, gently,
And the sun came out.
I remembered you today.
Shedding a regretful tear.
That touch, that smile,
Those eyes, that loving.
Yearned for now, but lost
Never to be regained.
I remembered you today.
Easy reminiscence of age.
The ready tears of the old,
Trickling down my aging face.
Fading memories of past love,
Memories soothing me to sleep.
Author notes
This was about someone I had put out of my mind since I was 15 because the memory of our enforced separation was too painful to remember. Then, that day I saw their face again for an instant ans it all flooded back and brought me to tears.
Written February 9th, 2006
A contest entry
- Where Is The Love? by Little Lottie.
750 points, ended June 1, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is a wonderful piece, thoughtful, honest, creative, emotional. It echoes in my memory, follows with my thoughts, and jerks on memories pained. It is beautifully sculpted, beautifully worded, beautifully heart-wrenching. Thank you for your entry.
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Capturing and imaginative
Well...what can I say that has not already been said? Probably nothing, this poem is so wonderful and is very deep and emotional. You have captured me immediatly with the title and the way it follows through constantly is wonderful. Your author notes explained very well what this poem was about and I read through it again to get a picture of what you would be feeling. I can say that imagination flows through this poem very well.
'I remembered you today.
You reached out your hand,
It lightly touched my heart.'
Those lines were just beautifully written and anyone with that skill should be praised and I hope that you have received the praise that you deserve for this wonderful piece. -
Very beautifully crafted. The repetitin works well here also. I can say, I really enjoyed this and love the "heart" of it. Excellent
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It's about alot of things.
This one gets alot of my emotions stirred up. It writes about where I live and where I have lived. It is painful when another poet re-creates a part of my own past and then I read it knowing that the words could have come from me. I certainly have people from my past that I remember with tears. I have present people going the way of Cain, who will in future times bring me pain for the decisions we are making now. And I am powerless to do anything about it.
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i love this poem it is so sweet. you put a lot of emotions and it hand a really good and gentle, natural flow to it. great job and keep up the good work.
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Yes you really have captured the sentiments and brought with impact the memory in this write! Well done! A beautiful write! Cheers Kaz.
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when i first started reading this I got the impression that it was written about someone who had passed away, until I got to the second to last line "Fading memories of past love". It's nice to think of past loves and remembering the good times as well as the sad.
It was easy to read, it had feeling and emotion, I enjoyed it
Jacqui -
Bravo
not spare of real emotion-- quite universal, the repitition works well here -
wow this is very good! i really enjoyed it!
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Excellent
The reader doesn't doubt the close to worshipful emotion of loss and rather revels with the author in beautiful rememberings bringing strength, resolve and soothing comfort. Don't let those memories fade, pard. -
Whoa...
That was beautiful, but oh-so sad... I mean, to see someone, especially a former love, that you have not seen in a great many years must be very hard on the heart. You captured the feelings of loneliness and heartbreak in a gentle, sad way. A most impressive, my friend; Take care!
God Bless,
Laura xo -
Very nice, Rick
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This poem has a nice natural gentle flow. I defiantly wasn't expecting all of the stuff between the first line and the ending statement. Your wording was excellent.
Great revelation, and a very good poem. I am glad I read it. thanks for sharing. Keep up the great work. Best of wishes to you. good luck in all that you do....peace always in all ways. You rock....
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Great Review
Thankyou for your kind comments. I enjoyed reading your work very much. Thanks again -
Great Review
Thankyou for your kind review of this poem. I really don't know where it came from. One moment I was sat there staring at a blank screen, then I saww a face and it all came back to me. And yes. I did shed a regretful tear or two
. Thanks again.
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Bravo! Absolutely beautiful!! Thank you so much for all your comments on my poetry, that was so special for you to have taken the time to read, and comment! This piece of yours is very, very kind on the heart, I have read it 3 times, goodness, Thank you!
Always,
Terri Norris. -
This is an amazinly beautiful poem. Wow, I really enjoyed the pure emotion reflected in the words and layout. You did a great job, in my opinion reflecting the emotions of losing someone. Thank you for posting.
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