In a small and ravaged village,
they are called the enemy.
Kids play in the muddy streets,
mass destruction all you see.
There a Mother softly cries
for a child lost to war.
Broken hearts are universal.
Must we do this anymore?
In a rich, affluent city,
they are called the enemy.
Kids play in the tended yards,
wealth and power all you see.
There a mother softly cries
for a child lost to war.
Broken hearts are universal.
Must we do this anymore?
God is God and what you call him makes no difference at all.
And he watches on in anger when we let our children fall
to the ignorance of war, it's the deadly call of hate
that will lead us all to hell, must we give in to this fate?
Can't we all live here together
on this speck we call the Earth?
Can't we find the good in others?
Somehow see their real worth?
Blood is being shed for nothing,
and the only cause I see,
is our narrow minded thinking
and the term "the enemy".
Author notes
Written February 8th, 2006
A contest entry
- Picture Inspiration by CherylAnn.
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Honorable mention
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this is just how i feel
this should be read by all
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Interesting poem ...
I did one almost exactly like it some years back. It's posted here somewhere.
Mine didn't rhyme though.
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AMEN
a very true and thought provoking write,as this lands needs peace.We all should be able to live together here,For his first commandment was for us to love one another,without that we are doomed...A great message poet
Good Luck and thanks for entering
Blessings
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Well said. I like how your first and second stanzas work together. When I think of God's tears, I think they are for the children that suffer because of our selfishness, our apathy, our warped mentality.
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nice
this is really nice poem, and its true. But honestly, peace and war, views on both are subjective...and its a shame (im anti-war) because this is just our nature...its our human nature...we are just one of the many species struggling to survive on this planet, and we are nothing more then the intellectually superior species...and we manage to dominate because of our intelect. But being intelectually superior doesnt make us any better, we still have adapted to this earth very similarly to every other land animal, and sea animal, and insect. Its about competition, and within our human nature is violence, like every other animal...we fight, we just fight in much more destructive ways and with more technological advancements because of our intelect. If you gave any fish or maybe a kangeroo our intelect- what they would do would be almost exactly what we do...But this is a good poem, i liked it a lot. You might like my poem i entered for this contest- "Survival"
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very well done.
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A simple point made very directly by contrasting scenes. Maybe not a new idea, but one that needs reinforcing whenever it occurs to a poet or songwriter - or anyone for that matter - to raise it.
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Excellent
Great write Rakerman, Very strong messege and very well said. -
song style
amazing write you have here. very thought provoking. if only we could live in peace and harmony in this speck we call earth. have you thought of putting this piece to music? the beatles song "imagine" came to my mind as i read this. -
Always two sides to every story - two enemies here, this is conveyed well in the lines of these verses - Double space after ddestruction in verse 1.
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