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5 haiku - From my window

gentle  breeze lifts leaves
white blossoms softly falling
drifting slowly down



pantiles on roof-ridge
cutting grey douceur of clouds
chaffinch flitting by



sudden shock of pink
azaleas defy me!
happiness in spring.



brush-stroke of a cloud
cannot hide an azure sky
triumph in heaven!



weathered squares of wood
trellis bears honeysuckle
promising sweetness


[c] 2006

Author notes

This is one of the first groups of haiku I ever wrote. I am conscious now of how many rules of the form I broke whilst writing them. Originally they were in a Z-shape across the page, to emphasise that they could be taken in any order. Any of them may be taken as an individual haiku, rather than part of a small, themed collection.
Written February 8th, 2006

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  • maa gold member
    April 19, 2008
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    colorful and lively


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      April 19, 2008
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      Thank you for your praise. I am not satisfied with this set, I'm afraid.


  • ShelleyA gold member
    February 15, 2006
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    A beautiful string of Haiku. Lovely imagery and flow. Vivid snapshots of the beauty of nature. Well crafted and a most enjoyable read.

    ShelleyA


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    February 9, 2006
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    bows to Linda in thanks


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    February 9, 2006
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    very nicely arranged, Haiku forms.. I like the variety of poetry..in this keep up the good work..
    Linda


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    February 8, 2006
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    trublu - yes I think I am most satisified with those two myself. Glad you liked the presentation.


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    February 8, 2006
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    Thanks, Zandr.

  • trublu
    February 8, 2006
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    nice collection

    these are really nice! my favorites were 3 and also 5. lol cant get any better than haiku about plants! (thats the landscaper in me coming out.) seriously good feel and nice flow throughout.
    bobby


  • sanmdr
    February 8, 2006
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    interesting write in creative words....with very good flow..


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    February 8, 2006
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    Why thank you, Melodies.


  • Melodies
    February 8, 2006
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    Your words fall gracefully like spring blossoms drifting from a tree. Lovely.

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